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mk i think I'm done, might make minor edits but yeh

6/10 It looks nice enough, I guess, but I'm not a fan of the Delphox line.

Forum Name: Adamance Ascendant Character Name: Yukimura Hiroki Alias: The Hellfire Knight Age: 15 Gender: Female Sin: Wrath Appearance: A girl with fairly light skin and a rather small frame, even for her age, standing at about 4'8" or 142 cm. She has the unusual combination of somewhat large violet eyes and fine, hip-length silver hair. She's about as well-muscled as you'd expect the average fifteen year old teenage girl to be. Overall, her face lends itself to an impression of looking rather refined and aristocratic. She generally wears a dark-colored skirt with a lighter, long-sleeved top, both with violet accents to complement her eyes. She will occasionally pair this with leggings, and if she's feeling particularly adventurous (which is rare) she'll get a shorter skirt to achieve grade B zettai ryouiki. Of course, this is when she's not trying to hide her identity. She will wear platform shoes and a drab cloak that covers most of her body, and avoid speaking if at all possible. She wears a device on the left side of her face, running from her throat to her chin. Just below her chin is a speaker; the device picks up vibrations from her throat and acts as a voice changer, turning her small whispers (so no one hears her real voice) into a clearly artificial voice of some kind, which she changes on occasion. Mech Appearance: Hiroki's mech is quite bulky, making her appear larger than she really is upon initially sighting her piloting it. Its most striking features are the large cannon mounted at about the elbow of the right arm, and the "wings" that are actually an array of thrusters and guns. The cannon is orange and has a hexagonal shape, extending almost down to the feet in a neutral position, with the distinctive yellow and black "caution" pattern in a stripe at the end of it. There's a squarish panel on the back underneath which many of the important systems are housed, though this is of course covered by the heaviest armor. The plating overall is a dark gray, with faulds protecting the waist area. The chest and legs are divided into four plates each. The outer and inner edges of each plate on the chest have blue stripes along them, and similar stripes are found along each joint of the mech. An orange glow can be seen leaking from underneath the plating. The mech also features a somewhat angular helmet covering her whole face, the visor leaving just her eyes and nose visible. The visor darkens in response to intense light. Finally, it also has two shoulder-mounted cannons that can be set to automatic fire or slaved to the main gun. Personality: Contrary to her elegant appearance, Hiroki is rather jittery and easy to upset, and doesn't appear to handle stress particularly well. However, she's also stubborn (though easily frustrated, this will rarely cause her to actually give up on something) in the extreme, doubly so if it involves winning an argument or otherwise proving herself correct. She's also in possession of a rather fragile ego. Despite this, or perhaps because of this, she's determined to prove that she's at least equal to everyone else, if not better. Motivation: See above. Hiroki's stubbornness and determination led her to striving for greater and greater heights in this tournament, and this is one of the few things she considers herself competent at. Mechs Stats: Speed: 2. It actually hovers off the ground slightly for most of the fight, but it's really, really, really slow. More accurately, it has very poor acceleration and therefore maneuverability, though its top speed is actually quite high in comparison and floating makes it possible to strafe - though how useful this will be is questionable given the speed it will typically be moving at. Melee: 4. The mech lacks any truly specialized melee weapons, but the powerful servos make the mech capable of delivering punishing melee blows. The cannon was also designed and built with being used to club opponents in mind as a secondary function. Being able to float off the ground also frees her legs up to make kicks much easier to deliver. The sheer mass of the plating also adds that much more force to the blows. Firepower: 6. The mech's main cannon is incredibly powerful and the mech's powerplant is more than enough to match. Alongside this, it has auxiliary cannons mounted on the backs of the legs, and the "wings" are mostly an array of more guns and thrusters for control. Overall it's capable of firing an absurd number of low-powered bursts or concentrated, powerful beams. Some of the wing-mounted guns are slaved to the main gun, aiming and firing together with it. The leg guns essentially respond when Hiroki kicks. The main cannon can fire beams, bursts, or exploding packets of plasma, as well as creating a short ranged "plasma cutter" for melee. Armor: 5. Heavy plating and strong joints allow the thing to physically take quite the beating, and the majority of the wing-mounted cannons are controlled by an internal targeting system for the purpose of point defense - attempting to shoot down incoming projectiles. The plating is also designed with energy dispersal in mind, able to take a number of energy-based attacks before failing. Signature Attack: None. Hiroki's strategy doesn't rely on a single finishing blow; rather she simply batters down her opponents with a withering barrage of superheated plasma. Special Ability: Hellfire Mantle. The mech can direct its power into a superhot field of plasma surrounding itself, and this field can be discharged in a chosen direction allowing for a burst of acceleration or as the opener to a barrage. It takes a moment or two to form, however, disables the usage of all of the guns, and can't be maintained for too long due to the fact that it overloads the mech's cooling systems. Character Stats: Observance: 1. Though initial conversations with her might not reveal this, Hiroki is fairly intelligent. Reflex: 2. She gets hit, a lot. She tries very hard to not allow this to happen and has gotten much better at it. Social: 0. Any attempt at trying to wage psychological warfare would probably just end up with her flustering herself. Other: She's also a pretty good singer. (She's an alto.) I'm using anime rules on appearance, shh. Also not sure if the special ability costs points, or if the Speed stat should cost more or less.

This is quite the old thread, but I'm bringing it back up because not only has this issue not gotten better, it seems to have actually gotten worse over time. I won't name any names for the sake of confidentiality, but we have hosts that are now flat out giving up on certain ideas or rebooting certain older RPs because people simply don't do anything. It's really hard to run an open-world or character-driven RP because no one takes initiative as has been discussed earlier.

Yeah, that's something I've had a hard time with as I look over with for revising. I know word choice is awkward in a few places but I can't quite figure out what to change the awkward stuff to.

There haven't been more fous available sice I rolled 'em. DW decided to make the things limited.

I didn't post the max ascended NP3 Amakusa Shirou Tokisada though

7/10

Thanks to everyone who's wished me well and all that. Though I do wonder how I come off as responsible, lel

already rated/10

M A X I M U M T R A P A C H I E V E D

@Ama yeah I am actually not a big pie fan but cake is- /redirect Morshu, theabyss

already rated/10

7/10

Not sure where to go next, tbh.

I am the rules So next update is currently waiting on Grizzlybrand, Yagami, Pyon, and Lexi. Stratos, Cyaloom, and Hukuna, you'll probably get updates soon, ideally before this Monday, depending on how badly I procrastinate get loaded with schoolwork.

(shh i just suck at titling things okay) The sun beat down harshly on the featureless waste. The two men's steps kicked up tiny puffs of dust as they walked, hanging in the dead air for a moment before settling back down to the earth. At a glance, the pair seemed indistinguishable – drab brown cloaks obscured most of what sat below their broad hats, the clothing a desperate attempt to fend off the onslaught of the uncaring orb burning in the sky above. Each man walked slowly toward the other, each man clutched a gun in his right hand, each man was resigned to the fact that one of them would not leave this desolate nowhere. The man on the right spoke first. “You know why I'm here. What you did to those people is unforgivable.” His voice was somewhat deep, his tone firm, echoing slightly through the wastes. “Unforgivable? Unforgivable? You know damn well why I did what I did.” The second man's voice was higher, and less steady, faintly quavering as he shouted his answer back. The acrid sting of body odor was present on him, underneath the smell of dirt and dust that smothered everything else in this place. “Everyone knows. That's not an excuse. The fact of the matter is that you did it, and now you're going to pay the price, one way or another. Justice will be served.” There was a trace of. . . something, in his voice, as if he was trying to convince himself of what he said. “Justice? There's no justice in this world, and you of all people should know that. If there was justice, the bastards responsible for this would be dying, not good, honest people. If there was justice, there would be enough food for everyone.” “Food or not, you still killed people. Innocent people, people who had never done you nor anyone else wrong, and all so you and your family could be comfortable. You think you're better than them? You deserved what they had?” His voice was rising, whatever strange quality that was in it before dying out as the volume of his speech increased. The man's grip on his pistol tightened, skin dyed and dusted with dirt showing white underneath its coating. “What the hell was I supposed to do? There was enough water for one family to survive. One! You sit there and lecture me about how horrible and selfish I am, but did you have to watch your sons starving to death? Your daughter almost die because she hasn't had anything to drink in three days? You telling me that the right thing to do was to watch my children suffer and die while I sat on my hands and waited for someone who doesn't give a rat's ass about anyone here to send us help?” His voice rose to match and more, each acting as if louder words were somehow truer. It seemed like he would have shaken a fist, but instead both men stood deathly still despite their shouting. “You killed dozens of people! They had children, too, but that didn't slow you down. They were exactly the same as you, same life, same problems, but none of them decided to murder everyone around them!” “I did what I had to do! I was watching my entire family die! If I hadn't done it, EVERYONE would be dead! Everyone! You're gonna tell me that what I did was wrong, saving one family instead of letting them all die was wrong?” “Yes! You killed entire families, ended lineages for your own personal benefit! Don't pretend like you can hide all of what you did. I saw it all. Men, women, it didn't matter to you. I saw a little girl the same age as yours with a bullet in her back. How do you think yours feels, knowing that her daddy murdered her friends in cold blood? That's not the actions of a human being, that's what happens when you give a rabid dog the ability to shoot a gun. And now I'm going to put you down, and it's still better than what you deserve.” His grip tightened even further on the firearm at his side, the leather-wrapped grip creaking in his fist, but he remained motionless otherwise. “How can you be so stupid? Growing up, you were always the smart kid, but now, what? You can't understand simple math? There was a week's worth of food and water for everyone in town, and nothing else for miles. Supplies were supposed to arrive in a month. All they would have found when they got here was corpses. You know what?” His white-knuckled grip on his own pistol loosened, and it fell to the ground with a faint thump and a puff of dust. He kicked it savagely in the direction of the other man. “Shoot me. I don't care. If I'm evil, if what I did was wrong, if you really think that I enjoyed doing it and that saving my family is a crime, shoot me.”

Yukari's power to manipulate boundaries. My weakness is requiring copious amounts of Mountain Dew to function.

8/10 looks nice

Honest rating: 6/10, could be nice but like you said, bleh horizontal