TyranntX Posted May 7, 2015 Share Posted May 7, 2015 As the name suggests, this topic is for feed back of my Creative writing post. I mainly started that to keep those who are excited for the game buisy while we work a bit more on the demo. So Tell me what you think? Like it? Love it? Hate it? Needs more Deadpool? feel free to share your thoughts. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karudae Posted May 21, 2015 Share Posted May 21, 2015 It's quite good. I like the characters, their personalities are well developed. One grammar thing, whenever a new person speaks, put it one the next in, e.g. When Xander/Melody left the Experimental room, Clain said to the others "Drat... Another failure, looks like giving the poke'mon the armor of a Golem wasn't a good idea after all". Maree snapped at him, "Well what did you think was going to happen cue ball? Have you ever heard of a Rock/Psychic type before?". " Solrock and Lunatone are Rock/Psychic types" Susan said calmly, trying to keep the peace. Instead of... When Xander/Melody left the Experimental room. Clain said to the others "Drat... Another failure, looks like giving the poke'mon the armor of a Golem wasn't a good idea after all". Maree snapped at him "Well what did you think was going to happen cue ball? Have you ever heard of a Rock/Psychic type before?". " Solrock and Lunatone are Rock/Psychic types" Susan said calmly, trying to keep the peace. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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