Ymora Academy [OOC / Sign-Ups Closed]

[Felicity]

Name:Niro Sakuraba

Age:15 birth date 10/31/

Program:Trainer

History:Parents where famous trainers but when i showed no signs of being a good trainer they left me at there parents and went off to the kalos region,now im trying to be the best to show them they where wrong

Starter:Evee ( Unless a shiny dratini is acceptable they did say dragonite was a exception.. i really like dratini i acully got a shiny dratini on my black and white but anyway thats off point)

Starters name :Luna(eevee) or Jewel(dratini)

Look like:

just without the hat with a simple long sleeved blue tee shirt and tan kahki pants with black and blue hightop checkered shoes

Personality: quiet,friendly unless hes feeling akward or threatened,quietly cares for not just my own pokemon and friends but others also, will get mad if people or pokemon are threatened ,when faced with challenges can act overconfident or unsure of himself depending on the challenge at hand.

(Just tell me if i need to explain or change something

I'm going to be blunt here. Kindness will do your writing no favours.

Funnily my main issues aren't with segment length, it's with the calibre of writing. In your Background you used "I" and "Me". RPing as a character is more like puppetry than acting, a distinction you need to remember. The character is not you, they are never written in first person. Third person only, so that you can essentially fit your post in with others continuously. Your personality is almost fine except for the "Can act over confident or unsure of himself" part. It sounds flimsy, too erratic. It would make sense if you dropped the Over confident part though. Then you have a stock introvert character, though that isn't bad in itself. Otherwise he actually seems like an interesting character.

Furthermore, whilst there are probably circumstances around it, you need to work on your grammar a little. Really it's punctuation and some spelling. Nail those and you're fine.

As for the starter, shinies are fine, so long as you aren't running around catching all the uniquely coloured pokemon.

Last, maybe try to describe your character without the picture? Being able to do so without a picture is a good skill to develop when starting out as an RPer.

Make some adjustments and, like Cyaloom, we can add you to the Reserve list for if someone drops out from the RP.

[NiroSakuraba]

ah ok thank you for the tips,and yeah writing isn't my strong suit,again thank you for all the tips.

[WildChalice]

Name: Aliah “Shadow” Crossgem

Age: 15 (Birthday February 21st)

Hometown: Unknown / Ambrette Town (Kalos)

Program: Trainer

Starting side: Student

Appearance: (Pants are black)

Personality: Withdrawn and aloof, Aliah views the world as though he weren't apart of it. Prefers to avoid conflict, but can't turn his back on those in trouble. Rarely speaks but always has something important to say.

Starter:

Keme

Froakie w/Protean (Male, Level 8)

Modest Nature

Water Pulse

Quick Attack

Lick

-

Double Team

Smokescreen

Backstory: Aliah recalls little of his past, outside of the storm that washed his broken body up on the shore of Ambrette Town. Taken in by the town doctor, Dr. William Crossgem, Aliah was thought to be around 9 years old. He bore scars, both physical and mental, that showed a cruel and unthinkable life. Though clearly shell-shocked at the sudden changes in his life, Aliah quickly grasped the doctor's practice and forced his way into helping Crossgem with his work. Crossgem's only attempt at rebuffing the boy, resulted in Aliah huddled in the closet for several hours.

Three years would pass with William regularly attempted to engage Aliah in conversation of any kind. Though it seemed hopeless William refused to give up. One thing William realized Aliah enjoyed was the staring at the sea. Some of the older, and younger, residents had taken to calling Aliah 'Shadow' as the boy soundlessly appeared and disappeared without warning. The kids would taunt Aliah calling him a 'Shadow Boy' to his face. Aliah would simply raise an eyebrow and walk away. Late one evening Aliah went down to the seashore to sit. He stumbled on a tiny frog that was clearly hurt. Gently picking up the frog pokemon, Aliah hurried it home to be treated. Crossgem was woken by the sounds of working at 2 am and headed down to see the fuss. He froze at a symphony of strange sounds floating up to him.

Peering into the room unseen, William Crossgem began to cry softly. Aliah was laughing and smiling. The Froakie, covering itself and Aliah in bubbles, had broken the steel wall around Aliah's heart. From that day on Aliah and Froakie were inseparable. It would seem Crossgem's attempts at conversation weren't in vain for Aliah had soaked every word up like a sponge. The boy simply hadn't the connection necessary to use them. Local trainer's passing through would help Aliah learn the basics of battling and caring for Froakie, now nicknamed Keme. It was one of these trainers that brought a leaflet detailing Ymora's Academy.

With William's blessing, Aliah spent the next three years training. Both himself and Keme. Finally the day arrived and Aliah ventured off to Ymora's famous Academy.

Extra:

Leaving key details about past out for story purposes.

Aliah wears a silver ring with the medical symbol on it at all times.

Aliah has a brand on his lower back and countless scars crisscrossing his body. Due to this he's never seen without a shirt.

Edited September 28, 2015 by WildChalice

[AuthorReborn]

I've seen people wanting a Gible with Endure on it. I sure wish I were clowning around, but man whatever the fuck floats someone's boat.

Endure Gible is used to become the popular Defensive Garchomp set, which is the typical Garchomp with Rough Skin and Rocky Helmet, but with Endure, it allows any physical attackers to take significant damage before being able to take the Garchomp down. This allows otherwise threatening mons like Mega Lopunny to be easily revenge killed.

More on topic though, I am getting some interesting ideas just from browsing movesets. I think my team will be a fun one, that's for sure.

[Chim]

Name:Niro Sakuraba,

Age:15 birth date 10/31/

Program:Trainer

History:Parents where famous trainers but when he showed no signs of being a good trainer they left him at there parents and went off to the kalos region,now he's trying to be the best Trainer and person to show them they where wrong.

Starter:Jewel the Shiny Dratini.

Look like:He has a light tan colored skin with medium long grayish black bangs that slightly bend and are spiky and lean to one side of his face and one single spiky bang and went downward on the opposite side of his face.He usually wears a simple long sleeved blue tee shirt ,and tan kahki pants with black and blue hightop checkered shoes.

Personality: He's quiet and friendly unless hes feeling akward or threatened.Quietly cares for not just his own pokemon and friends but others also. He will get mad if people or pokemon are threatened ,when faced with challenges can act unsure of himself depending on the challenge at hand.

You forgot the starting side.

Also no dragon types as a starter. I mentioned Dratini as a borderline Pokémon between friendly dragon and brutal dragon, but not acceptable as a starter. Add the ability, nature (if you want) and a moveset. But yeah, Dobby and I aren't going to handle 15+ people so you'll character will be placed on the reserve list for when someone has to drop out.

Name: Aliah “Shadow” Crossgem

Age: 15 (Birthday February 21st)

Hometown: Unknown / Ambrette Town (Kalos)

Program: Trainer

Starting side: Student

Appearance: (Pants are black)

Personality: Withdrawn and aloof, Aliah views the world as though he weren't apart of it. Prefers to avoid conflict, but can't turn his back on those in trouble. Rarely speaks but always has something important to say.

Starter:

Keme

Froakie w/Protean (level 8)

Modest Nature

Water Pulse

Quick Attack

Lick

-

Double Team

Smokescreen

Backstory: Aliah recalls little of his past, outside of the storm that washed his broken body up on the shore of Ambrette Town. Taken in by the town doctor, Dr. William Crossgem, Aliah was thought to be around 9 years old. He bore scars, both physical and mental, that showed a cruel and unthinkable life. Though clearly shell-shocked at the sudden changes in his life, Aliah quickly grasped the doctor's practice and forced his way into helping Crossgem with his work. Crossgem's only attempt at rebuffing the boy, resulted in Aliah huddled in the closet for several hours.

Three years would pass with William regularly attempted to engage Aliah in conversation of any kind. Though it seemed hopeless William refused to give up. One thing William realized Aliah enjoyed was the staring at the sea. Some of the older, and younger, residents had taken to calling Aliah 'Shadow' as the boy soundlessly appeared and disappeared without warning. The kids would taunt Aliah calling him a 'Shadow Boy' to his face. Aliah would simply raise an eyebrow and walk away. Late one evening Aliah went down to the seashore to sit. He stumbled on a tiny frog that was clearly hurt. Gently picking up the frog pokemon, Aliah hurried it home to be treated. Crossgem was woken by the sounds of working at 2 am and headed down to see the fuss. He froze at a symphony of strange sounds floating up to him.

Peering into the room unseen, William Crossgem began to cry softly. Aliah was laughing and smiling. The Froakie, covering itself and Aliah in bubbles, had broken the steel wall around Aliah's heart. From that day on Aliah and Froakie were inseparable. It would seem Crossgem's attempts at conversation weren't in vain for Aliah had soaked every word up like a sponge. The boy simply hadn't the connection necessary to use them. Local trainer's passing through would help Aliah learn the basics of battling and caring for Froakie, now nicknamed Keme. It was one of these trainers that brought a leaflet detailing Ymora's Academy.

With William's blessing, Aliah spent the next three years training. Both himself and Keme. Finally the day arrived and Aliah ventured off to Ymora's famous Academy.

Extra:

Leaving key details about past out for story purposes.

Aliah wears a silver ring with the medical symbol on it at all times.

Aliah has a brand on his lower back and countless scars crisscrossing his body. Due to this he's never seen without a shirt.

I don't see any problems. I'll talk about it with Dobby and if he also gives his approval, your character will also join the reserve list.

[Ragnar]

Name: Toshiro Haibara

Age: 14

Hometown: Fushia City

Program: Breeder

Starting side: Student

Appearance: Toshiro is 5'8 tall, has a slender built frame body and has a fair skin complexion. His eyes are always squinting that almost hides his cold green eyes. Toshiro's jet black hair is quite long and has chin-length bangs parting on each side of his face and a matching long ponytail sticking out at the back of his hair. His attire is consists of a dark green hooded t-shirt and a fitted black long-sleeve shirt underneath it. also, He wears a baggy white sweat pants along with his fashionable wooden sandals.

Personality: Toshiro is a well disciplined and a polite young lad that avoids conflicts as much as possible. Altho, His politeness can get a little bit annoying sometimes, It's hard to discern whether Toshiro is being sincere or just being sarcastic with from the way he answers people. Toshiro is also a book reader and often gets lost in thoughts and completely ignores the world while reading one of his pocket books.

Starter: Bulbasaur(Midori, F, Chlorophyll) (Its right eye is shut close due to a unique vertical scar running across it.)

Moves:

Tackle

Vine whip

(NO MOVE)

(NO MOVE)

Support moves:

Sleep powder

Leech seed

Backstory: At the age of 10, Toshiro lost his parents during a family trip gone wrong at the Fushia city safari zone. An enrage wild pokemon appears from the tall grass and savagely attacks his family. His mother and father protected the young boy as much as they could, long enough from him to escape. But unfortunately, both of his parents got murdered in the process. The local rangers and Janine(the gym leader) arrive at the incident, but it was too late, the damage was done, the boy was left traumatize and parentless. She felt sorry for the boy. So, out of sympathy. The young ninja girl decided to take care of him for the time being.

As the years go by, Toshiro learned to move on with his life and decided to devote his life working at the Fushia city gym, serving Koga and Janine.

The boy grew up inside the Fushia city gym, progressively learning about his master's culture and works as a humble servant at Koga's mansion for 4 years. Like Koga and Janine, He was persistent in learning about medicines and was fascinated by Koga's crafts in creating antidotes and poisons. Also, The boy shows passion in handling and taking care of Koga's poison Pokemons, which impresses both of his ninja mentors.

During his spare time, Toshiro likes to spend most of his time hanging out by the mansion's garden, reading his books under the shade a sakura tree. It helps the boy to relax and ease his troubles away from his past. One day, while doing his choirs at the garden, Toshiro found his first Pokemon companion by accident, an injured Bulbasaur suddenly appears and was resting at their backyard, under the shade of a tree. With the help of Janine, Toshiro decided to cure this sick seed pokemon and eventually becomes his partner ever since.

at the age of 14, Janine decided to relinquish Toshiro of his duties as a servant, His services are no longer required inside Koga's mansion. Not because he did something wrong or anything; it's just that, Janine wants Toshiro to pursue his passion and start his own adventure on the outside world. He was at the proper age to set on a journey and being stuck inside this mansion for almost 4 years isn't doing much good for the boy. He needs to go out, explore the world and fulfill his dreams. She told him that go to the Ymora region and start a new life to find his true calling as a breeder.

Toshiro agreed and was grateful to his master in enrolling him in the Ymora region. So it begins, The humble ninja servant and his Bulbasaur set course on Ymora academy to qualify as a certified Pokemon breeder.

Extra: He's a bit of a neat freak and has an amateur background in medicine (mostly antidotes and understanding how poison works)

Edited September 27, 2015 by Ragnar

[Darvan Korematsu]

Yo Chim or Dobs either one, would you mind if I tweaked Ross' personality just a little bit more for some finishing touches? I feel like I have a better way to explain his attitude now.

[Commander]

Endure Gible is used to become the popular Defensive Garchomp set, which is the typical Garchomp with Rough Skin and Rocky Helmet, but with Endure, it allows any physical attackers to take significant damage before being able to take the Garchomp down. This allows otherwise threatening mons like Mega Lopunny to be easily revenge killed.

More on topic though, I am getting some interesting ideas just from browsing movesets. I think my team will be a fun one, that's for sure.

That's what I love about Pokemon with Huge Movepools. You can do so much with them.

Yo Chim or Dobs either one, would you mind if I tweaked Ross' personality just a little bit more for some finishing touches? I feel like I have a better way to explain his attitude now.

Sign-ups are more for a host to understand your character in order to create situations and interactions for them along with fixing any issues with the character and RP. Really the only time that changes need to be done is if the character does a 180 or something like that or changes like Pokemon or Program.

[Sutoratosu]

Hmmm... to have an emphasis on fire types, or not to have an emphasis on fire types...

on one hand, I would have a crap ton of justification for it as a nod to Mayanna's origins as a RP character... but on the other... I've either currently or at some point in the past had some type of fire trope going on with like... six other characters... and seven counting the original incarnation of Maya

hmmm... decisions, decisions...

[Tacos]

Just curious, are the legendary encounters (like Kage and Celebi, and Claude and Meloetta) still going to be a thing or no? I honestly thought they were pretty cool twists.

[Felicity]

Wait and see~

[Azeria]

"Fire is awesome!" - a Crazy Pyromanicac - 2006

[Commander]

Hmmm... to have an emphasis on fire types, or not to have an emphasis on fire types...

on one hand, I would have a crap ton of justification for it as a nod to Mayanna's origins as a RP character... but on the other... I've either currently or at some point in the past had some type of fire trope going on with like... six other characters... and seven counting the original incarnation of Maya

hmmm... decisions, decisions...

You could have a semi mono like I was planning for Henry (Aerodactyl, Lunatone, and T-tar/Aggron) at one point. I considered going dessert based for Henry...and I may or may not be doing something late I thought of for Henry for Citrine's Normal Mono Team.

[Sutoratosu]

You could have a semi mono like I was planning for Henry (Aerodactyl, Lunatone, and T-tar/Aggron) at one point. I considered going dessert based for Henry...and I may or may not be doing something late I thought of for Henry for Citrine's Normal Mono Team.

Hmmm... semi mono. I think I can pull that off, yeah... perhaps a sun core, and I know just what would be symbolically perfect for it...

[Chim]

Yo Chim or Dobs either one, would you mind if I tweaked Ross' personality just a little bit more for some finishing touches? I feel like I have a better way to explain his attitude now.

What kind of changes? Because if there are any big chances, we have to take a look at it again.

Hmmm... to have an emphasis on fire types, or not to have an emphasis on fire types...

on one hand, I would have a crap ton of justification for it as a nod to Mayanna's origins as a RP character... but on the other... I've either currently or at some point in the past had some type of fire trope going on with like... six other characters... and seven counting the original incarnation of Maya

hmmm... decisions, decisions...

One of the new NPCs has a fire mono.

[Tacos]

You could have a semi mono like I was planning for Henry (Aerodactyl, Lunatone, and T-tar/Aggron) at one point. I considered going dessert based for Henry...and I may or may not be doing something late I thought of for Henry for Citrine's Normal Mono Team.

That reminds me, I forgot to include that Adeline is going to have mostly flying types (a few exceptions here and there).

[Sutoratosu]

One of the new NPCs has a fire mono.

Huh... well then.

On second thought, nevermind. There was one crucial part of her original story I never considered... something I can use now in place of fire.

I know what I'll build her theme around.

[Chim]

Huh... well then.

On second thought, nevermind. There was one crucial part of her original story I never considered... something I can use now in place of fire.

I know what I'll build her theme around.

It's up to you. If you still want to go (semi) mono fire, but don't want to because of the NPC, I can still change it.

Edit: I closed the sign-ups.

[Sutoratosu]

It's up to you. If you still want to go (semi) mono fire, but don't want to because of the NPC, I can still change it.

Edit: I closed the sign-ups.

No, it;s fine. you go ahead and keep the Mono Fire for the NPC. I've decided I'm just gonna go with a sun theme over a straight fire mono... since I recalled that the sun was pretty much the origin point for my whole explanation and background lore back then...

That, and I honestly want to see if I can control the pyromania I- apparently -have enough to keep it from seeping into yet another character...

but that's a story for another time, in another thread.

[WildChalice]

Whoops... I forgot to say that Froakie is Male... can I edit my bio to reflect that?

[Chim]

Whoops... I forgot to say that Froakie is Male... can I edit my bio to reflect that?

Yes no problem, but your character is on the back up list. If a player drops out, Dobby or I will contact you to say you can actually post since we can only handle 15 characters.

[WildChalice]

That's fine. I didn't want to change anything without an okay just to be sure.

EDIT: Added Male Gender to Froakie

Edited September 28, 2015 by WildChalice

[Darvan Korematsu]

Aye Chim I edited Ross' personality to make him a little more comprehensible, at least to me, and I believe everyone else. Wanted feedback on the edits.

[Commander]

Extra- Due to his weird nature, don't be surprised if Ross says questionably logical things or horns in on conversations at the weirdest times. Everytime he does this though, he is thinking of something relevant to the conversation.

Nothing about the personality (which I think is fine now), but I keep forgetting to ask what that thing I underlined even means.

[Felicity]

Actually that looks suspiciously like a way to meta. It gives eh ability to ask random ass questions Ross may not care about but you, Darv, do. Fix that, if you would. Or try to justify it.