Sins of Avalon: Anthology [Compilations]

[Sutoratosu]

Basic introduction:

Eh, so... I was bored yesterday and was typing up a few responses for my RP Sins of Avalon during a bus ride from the technical center to my homeschool, and I figured, why the hell not make a few short stories for this world?

So I kinda did that. and I kinda liked getting into the swing of short stories again (for any who don't know, the first and last thing I ever wrote outside of roleplays was a short story about 5 years ago...) I've come a long way since my first days as a 12 year old struggling to come up with a coherent plot, learned quite a bit, done a few shenanigans... all this time though, I was holding myself back from trying to write a completely independent story again... until now.

The following stories that will be hosted in this thread are collections and series of related short stories that all take place within the same world as the last RP I intend to ever host- Sins of Avalon. You can go and look at the OOC to try to get some information on the world- but the basic gist is this: It's the same basic world of pokemon, but re-imagined and with altered events and timeline, as well as several changed aspects (For example: Modern Militaries under the commands of each individual region, Ten year olds are not allowed to go on journeys with super powered animals, gotta be eighteen. The pokemon league is held in a tourney style. There is a global religion centered around Arceus and the other major legendaries, etc...). It is basically pokemon after I've gone through and changed things to how I feel they would make more sense (and make a better anime series from...).

Many of these stories will take place away from the main plot of the RP itself as it's still in the very early stages, and most of them will be taking place either at the same time as the plot or will be set before it. These stories are intended to give more context and information about the world and let me flesh out things that I know I likely won't get a chance to in the actual RP.

My procedure for updating this will be to draft up a story or chapter in my own independent word processor whenever something hits me, then once I've done all the editing on that platform, I'll copy and past the final results into a Google doc and share the links on here (I do it this way so that even if the drive glitches or something gets deleted, I will still have an easily accessible offline copy to replace it). I'm going to say right now though- don't expect regular updates, but when they do arrive, I'll be sure to make it known that they've been added to this post.

And people are free to comment on the stories in this thread if they want... doesn't really matter to me since I'll be hosting everything on my drive account anyway. currently I have but one story started... more will likely come soon though.

Sins of Avalon: Anthologies

"Surge of Vermilion"

Surge. Electric type master, Gym Leader of Vermilion City, and a veteran of the War on Heresy fifth-teen long years ago. Surge thinks of himself as a simple man- takes gym challenges, hands out badges, and occasionally gets involved in keeping the criminal elements of Vermilion City's populace under control. He simply lives his life day by day, one moment to the next... just like he had to during the war.

When the Lightning Unovan receives a particularly desperate call from VCPD Cheif of Police John Booth to help subdue a monstrous threat to the city however, one that could well threaten to bring the pages of history coming full circle and a new war to the doorsteps of Kanto, little does surge know the conflict he is about to enter into will not only decide the fate of his beloved city, but that of a young and lost soul caught in the cross fire as well...

Prologue

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1avcuYLNH-eNHiR5CzzysF7SZx59FxOAWSEqzDqnLMfY/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 1- Memories of War

[in progress]

Chapter 2

[N/A]

"The Legend of Charlemagne"

~~Coming Soon!~~

[TheSilentSerenade]

This story isn't bad, but it would benefit from the withdrawal of the profanity - this is unnecessary. The Trainer that fought Lt. Surge did not have a chance to make a dent in Lt. Surge's Pokémon, which any Trainer would have done in his place. I have noticed that there was no reference made to the gym's interior, and no mention made of Lt. Surge's appearance, other than the brief mention of his eyes. I also feel that the chapter could have been longer. This story shows signs of promise, though, and I quite look forward to reading more of this story.

[Sutoratosu]

This story isn't bad, but it would benefit from the withdrawal of the profanity - this is unnecessary. The Trainer that fought Lt. Surge did not have a chance to make a dent in Lt. Surge's Pokémon, which any Trainer would have done in his place. I have noticed that there was no reference made to the gym's interior, and no mention made of Lt. Surge's appearance, other than the brief mention of his eyes. I also feel that the chapter could have been longer. This story shows signs of promise, though, and I quite look forward to reading more of this story.

Well, I appreciate the feedback at least.

For the profanity bit, I can't really comment too much about as it's really more of a subjective thing- for some people it tends to simply fall into the style of their narrative for their own reasons to use a bit of it, such as for tone, while for others, it may seem like an unnecessary choice made solely to cover up something lacking on the authors part, when in fact it may not be the exact case. I'm generally not the type to go scattering nuclear F-bombs hither and tither, but I'm also not afraid to insert a few things here and there either if I feel it will help get the tone and general feeling about the scene I myself am experiencing and seeing it as across...which more than a few post I've made in various RPs will attest to from my narration of the character's POV. that's simply part of my style, be warned now. If it feels right to me when things are being drafted, then I won't be afraid to include it. That said though, the amount of it that is included will vary because of that. Some chapters may have a bit more usage, while some may have less. It's not really something I can explain very easily without a long rambling...all I can say that in this case, what it really comes down to is individual perception on whether or not Profanity is necessary at all in a story.

As for the bit about the trainer not putting a dent in Surge's team- this is not regular pokemon. I'd like to reiterate that single fact. I've drafted my own changes to the league system and standards when I originally made this world for Sins of Avalon, and Gym Leaders and Elite Four Members are far more powerful than they are in the games, and defeating them by simply relying on type matchups alone isn't enough in the world of Sins of Avalon- one must actually use strategy and be able to adapt to changing variables on the field of battle, something which the young man who challenged surge lacked the skills to do, hence his easy defeat. Being able to sweep a gym with one or two super-effective mons was something I never really was too fond of, so when I made the league system for this, I made sure to make it so that winning a badge took actual, genuine effort on part of the trainer.

As for the lack of certain details and the short nature of the chapter- do recall that this is my first actual attempt at a Single-Author story in five whole years and the fact that it's merely a prologue; It's meant to convey a basic glimpse into the world of SoA as well as Surge as a persona and establish a bit of who he will be. Prologues are by their very nature relatively short, and I'm not going to be pulling out all the stops just yet in terms of my descriptions and intricate attention to every little detail, because again, I've been out of the loop for half a decade- I need some time to get readjusted from the writing experience I have had in recent times and get my bearings again; it's like when you go out in the winter and start up an old car- you need to give the old motor it a minute to sit and warm up before you just go for a joy ride.

As for the present though, the prologue fitted the ends I personally wanted it to, and I felt more or less satisfied with it's length because to me, trying to tack on more to it felt abit artificial because all that I wanted out of it had been done... so I really so no point trying to make it longer and just went ahead and posted it.

All this said however, as things progress and the story develops and I obviously figure myself out once again (Not that I honestly hade myself figured out very well the first time as a 12 year old kid though...), there will be more attention to detail and the chapters will generally be longer... or some of them may be shorter, depending on what I have planned individually.

While we're on the subject though, I'd like to clarify- I'm largely doing this for myself, not for constructive criticism or anything. While I will have the respect to at least listen to what people say if they choose to take the time out of their day to make a comment, even if I don't necessarily agree with it, I'm not going to be scrambling out of the way to try to adhere or mold myself to every comment or opinion that pops up- only those that I feel have a valid point and are worth going to the length of observing. Most things will be taken with a grain of salt though.

This is largely a combination of an online stress ball, as well as a test of confidence and resolve for myself to see if I'm willing to commit to something and stick to my guns... so yeah, like I said in the OP, I really don't care if people actually comment on the story here- it's not explicitly intended for self improvement. Now, if I do so happen to improve myself over the course of it, then great, but if I don't, I'm not gonna shed any tears, because that wasn't the overall point to begin with. That point of this, more than anything else, is to finally prove something to my own self, not to anyone else; to prove something I've been psychologically struggling with for a long time now.

I'm fully aware that everyone's always improving and that you can never get to a point where you've "Mastered" it. But right now, I'm facing a wall that I feel will block the road to any further improvement in my many years to come if I don't either scale it, destroy it, or find a way around it now. So my objective here isn't to explicitly improve- it's to ensure that I will have the conviction needed to continue down this road I've chosen, and continue to improve despite whatever obstacles may come my way.

As I said before, it is a psychological test and stress ball more than anything. I am however, glad that someone is enjoying it though, or at least feels it has promise, So I must thank you for that.

[TheSilentSerenade]

Thankyou for taking the time to give your feedback in response to my feedback. You make several good points and I appreciate the determination and courage that it must take to continually try to prove something to yourself and try to break through a creative writing writer's block. It's not an easy thing to do, but I believe that you can and will do exactly that - break through your block, in time, and emerge stronger for it.