Miltank's Rebellion : A Pokemon Reborn Rebellion in Hardcore

[CURIE]

Well, you being French explains the somewhat broken english. I just thought it was to reflect the fact that it was being written by a cow. 'Cuz you see, here in America, there's this (really good) fast food chain whose advertizing campaign is run by cows, and everything they write has hilariously bad spelling and grammar.

[AnimeFg]

This is amazing, probably the best run of this game so far, no offense supermario. hmu with a name of a ground type once you beat Terra <3

[Hiroki Tatsumi]

Soooo well.

I guess i'll take this back from today, the situation isn't evolving since the citizens are still stunned and the victims are being identified one per one, letting families getting more hurt and more hurt. However, Police is doing searches and is actually penetrating suspect's houses to find things related to terrorism , i guess that's all they can do for now, and we'll have to prepare ourselves to deal with ISIS since our country bombed their HQ in Syria.

In the meanwhile, i guess it's ok to take back this thread, you may expect and update today.

Thanks for all your prays and your messages, a friend of mine told me that wasn't solving anything, but as someone who was concerned for syrians, for palestinians, and who went to the meetings about that, i think knowing the situation and knowing that there is something really bad happening is enough to say no. So all that warm heart beat from everyone makes me and people i know mostly feel better. Thank you guys.

Aaand i'm sorry for my english, i really thought i was good at English, even if i saw errors in my walls of text that were mostly due on me typing very fast and lacking of reviewing myself before posting, but i thought that was understandable at least. May try to be better, and correct the previous updates aswell while there are only 5 of them.

See ya in the next Rebellion Chapter guys, may god bless you all

[wytch_doctr]

It's really very nice to have you back. It's clearly not an issue that can be resolved and shaken off in a matter of days. However, if you're not reeling up for it, I'd suggest taking a longer break. It would be sad to see this hilarious and thoroughly amusing series stay silent for a while longer, but if that's what you need, then I think it's completely acceptable to do that. It's not like this is a responsibility or such.

Speaking of your English, it's really good. There may be a skip and a break in the grammar but never enough to hinder the meaning.

Anyways, nice to have you back, Hiroki

[Dragon116]

It's really very nice to have you back. It's clearly not an issue that can be resolved and shaken off in a matter of days. However, if you're not reeling up for it, I'd suggest taking a longer break. It would be sad to see this hilarious and thoroughly amusing series stay silent for a while longer, but if that's what you need, then I think it's completely acceptable to do that. It's not like this is a responsibility or such.

Speaking of your English, it's really good. There may be a skip and a break in the grammar but never enough to hinder the meaning.

Anyways, nice to have you back, Hiroki

I agree on every point here, especially the English bit. It's not broken English, it's just slightly erroneous (for instance, you say beated instead of beat). It's totally understandable and has never hindered the meaning of what you're saying.

[Shad_]

Totally agree with everything said by doctr and Dragon

[CURIE]

Yeah, maybe "broken" wasn't the right word. Sorry about that.

[Loyalitie]

*disregard the fact that I was late as usual*

Woooow you're so creative (☞ﾟヮﾟ)☞

~MD feelings tho~

I understand your english, I did not find anything wrong at all

~ Maybe that's because I'm not from a english-speaking country ~

Anywayz, good luck with this. My hopes are with Bessie and with Paris

[Hiroki Tatsumi]

Thanks guys, you're the best of the best

Actually, things aren't getting worse. People continued their lifes , even if the thing is in everyone's minds. Today i went to a supermarket to buy various things, food and all you know the deal. People aren't looking at each other anymore, you're buying your things, you get out, and there isn't more. Also, when you're in frequented places, you have no choices but watching for yourself and watching everything around you, preparing to jump on the floor to dodge some bullets if any. President are taking measures to counterattack ISIS by bombing aswell, and will send floor troups to war. I may be called as a reservist if the policemen / gendarmes / firefighters - who are already trained - are sent to Syria to fight aswell...But well, this isn't for today , and in the meanwhile we have to continue leaving, even if that does imply to stay prepared about facing a warrish scene.

That's why, don't worry, i'm totally fine by taking this back, however, if i'm not sending any news suddenly, don't worry, that would just mean i've been called as a reservist , doing that fast formation to handle the country's protection from inside. Shame, our previous presidents removed the Military Service all guys had to go through before, so lot of guys, myself included aren't able to handle a war, that's why we'll have a quick formation to act as temporary policemens / firefighters if needed.

As for the english point, i quickly tried to correct errors i could see, don't hesitate if you can point some things not correct or not understandable.

Sooo let's talk about Bessie's adventures

Rebellion Diary Chapter Six : All you need is a Chubb

With Dragon freed from the UFO catcher, we were finally able to leave the Casino with a brand new item in our pocket, well two items. A Substitute TM as well as a Max Revive, thanks to St3ffo and Dragon116 who managed to win in the Casino games.

The two little pokemons were surprised at Chubb's evolution, and lame jokes came again with that, letting our brand new partner, Ra1den speak about us by calling us fools and noobs. I really wanted to crush him...But well , he will understand sooner or later what i'm understanding now.

Sooo we finaly went to Onyx School, but that asshole was here, the "Top Dog" didn't let us enter.

Soooo....We're locked.

How will we enter that ? D: We NEED this badge D:

C'mon guys. Let's keep cool. There is always a solution.

Such wise words here, are you growing up in your head, My little pony?

Dont compare me to those !!! (Uses Thunder Wave on Miltank)

Dam....You jerk.....Cutie little jerk....

Dont wanna break your little lovely mood, but we have a badge to earn, fatty paralized cow.

Don't go that far with me...You'll regret it.

Tch. You should cure yourself before speaking of revenge. I'll open a way by myself. Watch, Fatty.

Ra1den got out from the gym, we followed him to not miss him being wrecked by trainers. He went through Onyx until we found the other entrance to the gym. A guy was in front of the door, apparently waiting for us. He smiled while looking at us, and started teasing.

- Well, Fern told me you were going to use this way. There is no way a trainer that can't keep his pokemons in their pokeballs can win against me :3

Just watch.

The pokemon went on the ring and litteraly swept his opponent by using flame charges, i didn't know Electrike could learn that, but somehow it did and it worked. The pokemon beat the trainer, he turned himself to look at me and smile with arrogance. He's pissing me off.

But with that solved, we could enter the gym. Someone healed me and we beat all the students.

Well, that's a school. We have to answer those questions before progressing. Is anyone clever enough? I sure am, but i wont handle this all by myself....

Lemme Try.

At which level does Starmie learn rapid spin? 0 !!!

The Huntail's number in the Pokedex? 367 !
Corsola's Base Stat Total? 380 !!!
What level does Cubchoo Evolve? 37 !!!
How many pokemon can learn Lava Plume? 15 !!!

Wow, you got all the questions right.

Hurray for St3ffo Dynamo !!!! *-*

At least you're a bit useful....

And with that, we came to beat Florinia. But we had a little deal before. The "Top Dog" , Fern, was standing in front of the door, and didn't want to let us enter in. Well, he wanted a Pokemon battle, and there was no choice. So let's fight him.

I'll go cutie !

Chubb started the battle, facing Ludicolo. While Chubb didn't have any move that was super effective against Ludicolo, he managed to paralize him, letting the Zebra place charge beams to raise it's spattack. He took down the Ludicolo, forcing Fern to uses all his super potions on him. The Swag Jockey was pissed. He sent Grovyle as an answer, but the Pokemon was beaten by a single Flame Charge. Servine was next, despite its ability to tank the Flame Charge, he couldn't kill Chubb who kicked the pokemon just after that.

Ow yeah ! Evolution is good man !

The Jockey sent Roselia, and somehow, it outspeeded the Zebra, making it faint.

Hmpf. Didn't see that coming. How laaame.

Lemme show you what battling means. I'm on !

Ra1den went on the field, he tried to use Flame Burst, but the Rose was too fast for him, and wrecked him in one hit...At this point, i'm enjoying the fight.

So, you'll be the best...How lame you are. Well guys, none of you guys are fast enough, and none of you guys are bulky enough. Rely on the cow.

I went on the field, and managed to tank a Sludge bomb from the Roselia to use body slam on it, making it faint. The Jockey sent Ferroseed, while i was able to continue the fight, someone pulled me back.

What are you --

St3ffo dynamooooooo !!!

I was pulled by Dragon116 who let St3ffo take the lead, the pokemon used nuzzle against Ferroseed , paralizing it, and was able to put three charms on the steel ball, he then came back, shaking...Hands? with Dragon who took the lead.

Dragon used charge beam and stored enough power while tanking Ferroseed's hit, he finaly used a shockwave to end the grass pokemon and we won against Fern.

We did iiiiiiiiiiiiiiit !!!!

Well, i'm a bit surprised aswell. Ra1den, you'll have to learn what i learned aswell. You're maybe a strong pokemon, as i think i am, but you cant overcome your weaknesses alone. Teaming up is the key. You see, Dragon couldn't win alone, but with St3ffo on his side, he could overcome the weakness that he hardly tanks anything, and he won. Learn that for future battles.

Stop telling Bullshit. I'm enough alone.

The pokemon got up by himself, he walked a bit, but he fell under the pressure from the fight. I approach near to him.

Come on, on my back. We're a team, aren't we? I'm your friend, and those idiots are too. I didn't want to accept it at first.....But...I really like them. So please, lemme bear the pain with you, that's the key for you improving. Come.

Tchh...You're speaking like my mother..Well...I trust you.

The pokemon fainted, the guys were looking at me, they were all smiling....I don't like to open my heart like that...But well, guess i talked too much. I grabbed the pokemon, while Chubb could walk until the hall....Well i like this adventure...And now, they know i love them aswell. How foolish i am though.

Edited November 17, 2015 by Hiroki Tatsumi

[Shad_]

My previous trainer spent most of his days studying these kind of things without battling, that's why i knew the right answers

Also, with these glasses on there is nothing that can stop my mind *quickly puts the glasses on and makes a cool expression with a soundtrack in the background*

[Loyalitie]

Chubbessie?

I like it ~

[Fumble]

I totally ship Chubb X Bessie

Anyway, good luck against Florinia! Luckily Chubb and Ra1den know some Fire type moves, which should help, but of course, Cradily will be a menace...

[Dragon116]

Error catches chapter 6. These are very minor and don't prevent understanding what you mean. Essentially it's just grammar. However, you wanted to be alerted when you made mistakes.

First paragraph, first line " A Substitute TM aswell" you missed a space between as and well.

Third paragraph, second line "The pokemon beated the trainer" beated should be defeated or beat. "He's pissing me" should have "off" at the end.

Third paragraph, third line "we beated all the students" - again, beated for defeated or beat

Third pokemon talking section, first Miltank "Anyone is clever enough" should be "Is anyone clever enough"

Fourth paragraph, second line "and there was no choices" should just be choice. For future reference, "were" goes with plural words like "choices" and "was" goes with singular words like "choice". It's an important difference when you have a word like "Pokemon" or "sheep" which is the same regardless of singular or plural format.

Fifth paragraph, first line "any move that were" should be "moves" or "was", as per what I mentioned above.

Fifth paragraph, second line "Fern to uses all its" should be "use", and "his" unless you're making a joke that Fern is an "it" and not a "he"

Following Ra1den getting defeated "none of you is fast enough" should be "are" because there is an invisible plural "guys" following "you". "Are" goes with plural, "is" goes with singular. "none of you is bulky enough" and should be "are" again.

After Ra1den tells you to stop telling bullshit " pokemon get up by himself" should be "got". " I approach myself near to him" does not need "myself" as "I" already fills in for that.

If any of these are confusing, let me know and I'll explain or rephrase it so it's easier to read.

I love that St3ffo is so intelligent. It must be those glasses. Maybe Ra1den will learn how to stop acting like Fern.

[CURIE]

Unless you've already planned what your bonus Water type 'mon will be, here's a suggestion for when you eventually name a character after me. It's a long way off though.

In Ametrine Mountain, there's a legend of a weakling fish Pokemon who, if he or she trains hard enough, will become a fearsome dragon named Gyrados. Obviously any human would know this legend reffers to Magikarp, but keep in mind the Pokemon of Ametrine have never seen a Magikarp before. Instead, they assumed it is about the other weakling fish pokemon, Feebas.

That's where "Eagle" comes in. He's a Feebas who named himself that to represent the heights he wishes to achieve, and he's been training all his life to fulfill the prophecy and become the dragon of legend. But he must be doing something wrong, because no matter how hard he trains, he never feels like he gets any closer to evolution. When the Miltank gang comes by he joins them, hoping that going on an adventure rather than training in the same spot all his life will make a difference. Hilarity ensues when he learns the truth of his evolution and that now he looks like a girl.

[wytch_doctr]

Y'know, you should really be able to use the egg mon instantly. I mean, you hatched it, right?

[Hiroki Tatsumi]

My previous trainer spent most of his days studying these kind of things without battling, that's why i knew the right answers
Also, with these glasses on there is nothing that can stop my mind *quickly puts the glasses on and makes a cool expression with a soundtrack in the background*

Well, i guess he only trained his electivire, leaving you behind. What a moron, you're amazing D:

Chubbessie?
I like it ~

I totally ship Chubb X Bessie

Anyway, good luck against Florinia! Luckily Chubb and Ra1den know some Fire type moves, which should help, but of course, Cradily will be a menace...

That's not what you think...You idiots -//////-

Error catches chapter 6. These are very minor and don't prevent understanding what you mean. Essentially it's just grammar. However, you wanted to be alerted when you made mistakes.

First paragraph, first line " A Substitute TM aswell" you missed a space between as and well.
Third paragraph, second line "The pokemon beated the trainer" beated should be defeated or beat. "He's pissing me" should have "off" at the end.
Third paragraph, third line "we beated all the students" - again, beated for defeated or beat
Third pokemon talking section, first Miltank "Anyone is clever enough" should be "Is anyone clever enough"
Fourth paragraph, second line "and there was no choices" should just be choice. For future reference, "were" goes with plural words like "choices" and "was" goes with singular words like "choice". It's an important difference when you have a word like "Pokemon" or "sheep" which is the same regardless of singular or plural format.
Fifth paragraph, first line "any move that were" should be "moves" or "was", as per what I mentioned above.
Fifth paragraph, second line "Fern to uses all its" should be "use", and "his" unless you're making a joke that Fern is an "it" and not a "he"
Following Ra1den getting defeated "none of you is fast enough" should be "are" because there is an invisible plural "guys" following "you". "Are" goes with plural, "is" goes with singular. "none of you is bulky enough" and should be "are" again.
After Ra1den tells you to stop telling bullshit " pokemon get up by himself" should be "got". " I approach myself near to him" does not need "myself" as "I" already fills in for that.

If any of these are confusing, let me know and I'll explain or rephrase it so it's easier to read.

I love that St3ffo is so intelligent. It must be those glasses. Maybe Ra1den will learn how to stop acting like Fern.

You're the best ♥ Understood and corrected all the errors you pointed
Also, i'm agreeing on those glasses :3

Unless you've already planned what your bonus Water type 'mon will be, here's a suggestion for when you eventually name a character after me. It's a long way off though.

In Ametrine Mountain, there's a legend of a weakling fish Pokemon who, if he or she trains hard enough, will become a fearsome dragon named Gyrados. Obviously any human would know this legend reffers to Magikarp, but keep in mine the Pokemon of Ametrine have never seen a Magikarp before. Instead, they assumed it is about the other weakling fish pokemon, Feebas.

That's where "Eagle" comes in. He's a Feebas who named himself that to represent the heights he wishes to achieve, and he's been training all his life to fulfill the prophecy and become the dragon of legend. But he must be doing something wrong, because no matter how hard he trains, he never feels like he gets any closer to evolution. When the Miltank gang come by he joins them, hoping that going on an adventure rather than training in the same spot all his life will make a difference. Hilarity ensues when he learns the truth of his evolution and that now he looks like a girl.

Thank you for giving the Feebas idea. However, i'm against using new pokemons in the end game. Nothing with Feebas, but thing is i saw in my previous run that end game pokemons are hard to EV train, and simply are outclassed by the fully trained pokemons. So i guess i wont catch any pokemon past Agathe Circus, maybe some Hawlucha, as he doesn't require any special training, but when i'll be at the no return point i might just drop the catching aspect.

Y'know, you should really be able to use the egg mon instantly. I mean, you hatched it, right?

I'm agreeing with you, that would be correct in the plot, thanks for pointing that out.
I'll just set a rule i came with : I cant soft reset events to make them shiny, it's too easy to break my rules if i do that.

Rebellion Diary Chapter Seven : Before a very hard fight

Fern was defeated. I guess that was a cool thing to celebrate, but we didn't beat the leader yet, meaning that i'll have to stick with Electric types for a while. Well, they're funny, but anything that counters them is going to turn the trip into a nightmare. Chubb was sharing my thoughts as he to talked me about earning the badge no matter the price....Well, i was lucky to meet Chubb a while ago, if not for him, i guess i wouldn't be able to go that far, I wouldn't be able to rescue St3ffo alone, and that would prevent me from recruiting Dragon116 aswell....Yeah. If not for Chubb, i would not have any friend...I'm looking at him, he's always in his teasing mood, even when he bites the dust. Once again, teaching St3ffo "How to be a real man" he says...Well that's cute of him to take care of the group. Back against Fern, he did a lot...Well. I guess he's an idiot......But we're all idiots, aren't we?

Hey Milky, why are you starring at me like that?

I'm NOT starring are you , Electric Zebra.

Uh oh, I touched a nerve....Could it be...You like me? :3

Don't you dare say that again or i'm leaving you right now !

I'm turning my back, walking in the School's hall. What am i even doing !? Why am i getting so upset in front of this guy. ...I met so many Tauros, so many Bouffalants, they're made for me, i'm made for them...But i never felt such feels in front of them....Am i really...In love...? No. That can't be so, i'm a Rebellion Squad Leader, i can't be that girly. Falling for the first pokemon i meet? Fuck no , i refuse !

What is she even doing....?

She's in luuuuv :3

I think so aswell. I met a girl like her, she was a Dedenne. Always denying the fact that she loved me.. In the end, we loved each other for a very looong time...She was a cool girl.

Well. She may be a girl, but she has balls. I guess it's hard for her to accept feelings. Give her some time.

What are you even talking about? And since when do you speak with that compassion?

Well, you can't deny she's in love. I like her aswell. She reminds me of my mother. Always spreading some hopeful words, a beautiful Manectric that could move the world if she wanted to. I loved her above everything else....

What happened, Ra1den?

We were traveling together in Tanzan Moutain, a trainer came, he was starring at us. My mother tried to protect me until the end, but the guy caught her. He separed me from her...I was scared and ran away before he could get me. My mother was the kind of pokemon that wanted to be free until she dies....And...And...If i wanna be strong....no, I have to be strong....To take her back with me. I want to see mum above everything else...No matter how rude i have to be , no matter how cruel i have to be....I will never forfeit....Until i grab her back....

Owww....I'm sowwy for juding you that way...

Nah, that's fine. Everyone has a hidden side i guess. That's the same for the cow. All she needs is to be with friends....And you Chubb.

I guess...Well. We should leave her alone for now.

Let's take a break guys. I know a cool place where we can hide to rest a bit. Follow me.

We followed the pokemon, leaving Bessie in the school's hall. I didn't like that, but well, everyone has a Hidden side i guess. But well...I didn't think it would go that far with Bessie, always thought she was strong enough to not be affected by those teasings, but well, she's a girl after all...Maybe i did go too far with the cow...But i can't say i don't like her aswell. I did have nothing before Bessie, and now i'm with wonderful friends, living cool adventures, and that's all thanks to her...And....I'll never forget the evolution thing. The kindness she displayed touched me in the bottom of my heart...I guess i fell in love as well. But there is no way i'm going to tell her, that's men's pride. I'll help her, no matter what's the price i have to pay....But i wont confess...I simply can't.

The Electrike entered a building, we followed him in, there was a guy inside, i recognized him, he was a student at Onyx's School. He saw Ra1den and smiled, talking with a sweet voice to the pokemon.

- Look who came. Electrike my friend. You want to spend some time in the garden? With some friends? Sure, enter.

Triiiike

He doesn't say anything except his name, how lame. ~

Shaddup

Garden *-*

There was a wonderful garden at the top of the building, some grass pokemons were playing together, far away from this town's mood. That was refreshing. Dragon and St3ffo ran quickly in the middle of the place, playing together, while Ra1den just sit down under a tree and sleep a bit. I wish Bessie was here to enjoy it with us...But well. I'm walking, watching the whole place slowly...Until i found something interesting.

Hello, Nii-san.

Nii-san? What's this babe?

Nii-san means brother, you don't know? Come at me bro stuff. I'm Red_Chaos. What about you?

Name's Chubb. What are you doing here little girl?

I heard my fellow Pichu are evolving when their emotions reach the maximum level...But i have some problems with that.

Is that so? What's the deal then?

A lot of people are calling me insensible. I just can't cry or laugh, no matter what's in front of me. It's not i don't want to, that's i just cant.

Wanna try with me? I guess i'm good at messing with the other's emotions...Well that's a long story.

Tell me more about it.

Well...You see there is this girl i met while ago...She came with a crazy idea, starting a Rebellion to take the control over humans. I followed her in this adventure, because i felt like she was someone special. You see, we battled together against enemies, and i finally fell for her. As i understand she fell for me aswell. But there is no way i would confess , i have some pride you know...Well. Sorry for bothering you with some fairy tale type stories, that's not cool.

You don't bother me. You know, i don't know much about relationships, but i feel you should be honest with the girl. Loving someone else isn't a thing that will take your strenght, because you need lot of strenght to face your feelings...That's the strenght i dont have , after all. Hehehe....If you need something, ask me, i will help you to feel better....Because...I understand you.

The words resounded in the area. The pichu was surprised. She started to glow as i did when Bessie was with me...She was evolving as well....

W....What just happened?

You...You evolved...

Impossible.....I didn't even battle. And i didn't have emotions....

Hmmm.....Empathy. That's it. You were concerned by my story, i guess that's what led you to evolution...You're a pretty kind girl, Red_Chaos.

I guess...Well. Thank you for helping me though...But i feel bad for leaving you with your issues...May i go with you , in your Rebellion?

That's sweet of you, okay, you're with us.

http://i.imgur.com/AzDXrQT.png

Annnd with that, another pokemon joined us. The sun slowly left, and night came like everyday...It was time to find Bessie and battle Florinia, the gym leader. I guess everyone is in high spirit for that...Except maybe Bessie...Well..It will be difficult to bear with that pain.

What are you thinking about, Chubb?

Hm...Nothing.

This night reminds me the night we all met together, Chubby *-*

Do you really think...Rebellion is possible..?

As long as you rely on me, that's doable. ~

I guess that's something that can be realized, after all, we can all count on our dear leader. Let's go , guys.

(Thanks to Dragon116 for correcting the diary entry, you rock <3)

Edited November 18, 2015 by Hiroki Tatsumi

[Shad_]

Well, i guess he only trained his electivire, leaving you behind. What a moron, you're amazing D:

Aye, he was obsessed with that sh*tty pokemon

One day i'll defeat it, i swear on my pride i'll do it *raises an invisible sword up in the air*

[Loyalitie]

I foresee an encounter with Ra1den's mother in the future hehe

Or nah ~

Btw Bessie, admit it, Chubbessie is real, everyone knows (¬‿¬)

[CURIE]

Wait, if you stop getting new Pokemon in the end game, then that kinda ruins the point of Bessie collecting badges, doesn't it? The series might get stale as a result of it, too. I suggest you come up with some rule or something to keep changing your team otherwise you'll end up never recruiting Pokemon of later types like fire or ground. Or of course, water.

[Commander]

Wait, if you stop getting new Pokemon in the end game, then that kinda ruins the point of Bessie collecting badges, doesn't it? The series might get stale as a result of it, too. I suggest you come up with some rule or something to keep changing your team otherwise you'll end up never recruiting Pokemon of later types like fire or ground. Or of course, water.

To be honest, hardcore is much more friendly when it comes to team changes and grinding. A surplus of experience half the time along with the lucky egg and exp share at the start of the game scream: HEY! USE MORE THAN JUST SIX POKEMON! Heck, I barely even used the lucky egg and exp share outside of grinding new mons as you really don't need them. I doubt it'll get stale because there's like 500 options to go from and most have some viability when they're available.

[Dragon116]

Error catches chapter 7

First paragraph, second line " he talked me about " should have "to" between "me" and "about"

First paragraph, third line " no matter what's the price" would have more impact if you remove "what's". "meet Chubb while ago" should have "a" between "Chubb" and "while" and should end in a period rather than a comma.

First paragraph, fourth line " prevent me to recruit Dragon116" should be "from recruiting"

First pokemon talking, second Chubb " i hurted something" should be "hurt" but would be better as "I touched a nerve"

First pokemon talking, second Miltank "dare saying that again" should be "say"

Second pokemon talking, first Elektrike " that's hard for her" should be "it's" instead of "that's". "Let her some time." should be "Give" instead of "Let"

Second pokemon talking, third Elektrike "how crual i have to be" is spelled "cruel"

Second pokemon talking, fourth Elektrike " has an hidden side" should be "a".

Second pokemon talking, fourth Chubb "everyone has an Hidden side" should be "a". "that would go that" the first "that" should be "it". "was a guy in" should be "inside" and should end in a period instead of a comma.

Third pokemon talking, third Pichu " I heard my fellows, Pichus are" should be "fellow Pichu" and no comma inbetween. "are reaching the maximum level" should be "reach" instead of "are reaching".

Third pokemon talking, fourth Pichu "Lot of people" should be "A lot". "That's not i don't" should be "It's"

Third pokemon talking, fifth Chubb " is that girl i " should be "this". "As i understood" should be "understand". "i would confess me" easiest fix here is remove "me"

"fairy tale types stories" should be "type"

Third pokemon talking, sixth Pichu "strenght away, because" should be "strength". You did this a few times in this line.

Third pokemon talking, first Pikachu "W....What did happen?" should be "just" instead of "did" and "happen" to "happened"

Third pokemon talking, seventh Chubb " what leaded you" should be "led"

Third pokemon talking, eighth Chubb "That was time to" should be "It" instead of "That". Same for "Well..That will be difficult"

What a touching chapter. Those feels man, those feeeeels.

Edited November 17, 2015 by Dragon116

[Chim]

Y'know, you should really be able to use the egg mon instantly. I mean, you hatched it, right?

I agree with this. If you're lucky you hatch a Pokémon that counts as a the bonus catch you mentioned.

Btw how are you going to handle dual types like Lotad? Is it only when you have access to both types that you can use them?

[Genesis]

This is brilliant absolutely love it, takes me back to pokemon mystery dungeon I can't wait to see all the dailogues that come up

[wytch_doctr]

So adorable :3

gl with Florinia. Raiden and Chubb may be clutch

[Hiroki Tatsumi]

I foresee an encounter with Ra1den's mother in the future hehe

Or nah ~

Btw Bessie, admit it, Chubbessie is real, everyone knows (¬‿¬)

Who knows if we'll find Ra1den's mother in the future, that may be very cool for him though o:

Tha...That's not what you think. Idiot teenage girl -////////-

Wait, if you stop getting new Pokemon in the end game, then that kinda ruins the point of Bessie collecting badges, doesn't it? The series might get stale as a result of it, too. I suggest you come up with some rule or something to keep changing your team otherwise you'll end up never recruiting Pokemon of later types like fire or ground. Or of course, water.

To be honest, hardcore is much more friendly when it comes to team changes and grinding. A surplus of experience half the time along with the lucky egg and exp share at the start of the game scream: HEY! USE MORE THAN JUST SIX POKEMON! Heck, I barely even used the lucky egg and exp share outside of grinding new mons as you really don't need them. I doubt it'll get stale because there's like 500 options to go from and most have some viability when they're available.

That's what i was referring to precisely. The fact is i'm still going to catch pokemon, but only those who are giving something new, to the team. An example would be Lucario that i can catch right after Charlotte. He wont do anything to either Ciel or Terra, so that's a waste. Actually i'm recruiting as much pokemons as possible because every pokemon can bring something soon or later in the game. Like Pikachu who isn't mandatory now, but is still a lightball nasty plot attacker for the future. And since starting from Radomus i'll lose allies when i'll lose, i have to prepare backups aswell.

Error catches chapter 7

First paragraph, second line " he talked me about " should have "to" between "me" and "about"

First paragraph, third line " no matter what's the price" would have more impact if you remove "what's". "meet Chubb while ago" should have "a" between "Chubb" and "while" and should end in a period rather than a comma.

First paragraph, fourth line " prevent me to recruit Dragon116" should be "from recruiting"

First pokemon talking, second Chubb " i hurted something" should be "hurt" but would be better as "I touched a nerve"

First pokemon talking, second Miltank "dare saying that again" should be "say"

Second pokemon talking, first Elektrike " that's hard for her" should be "it's" instead of "that's". "Let her some time." should be "Give" instead of "Let"

Second pokemon talking, third Elektrike "how crual i have to be" is spelled "cruel"

Second pokemon talking, fourth Elektrike " has an hidden side" should be "a".

Second pokemon talking, fourth Chubb "everyone has an Hidden side" should be "a". "that would go that" the first "that" should be "it". "was a guy in" should be "inside" and should end in a period instead of a comma.

Third pokemon talking, third Pichu " I heard my fellows, Pichus are" should be "fellow Pichu" and no comma inbetween. "are reaching the maximum level" should be "reach" instead of "are reaching".

Third pokemon talking, fourth Pichu "Lot of people" should be "A lot". "That's not i don't" should be "It's"

Third pokemon talking, fifth Chubb " is that girl i " should be "this". "As i understood" should be "understand". "i would confess me" easiest fix here is remove "me"

"fairy tale types stories" should be "type"

Third pokemon talking, sixth Pichu "strenght away, because" should be "strength". You did this a few times in this line.

Third pokemon talking, first Pikachu "W....What did happen?" should be "just" instead of "did" and "happen" to "happened"

Third pokemon talking, seventh Chubb " what leaded you" should be "led"

Third pokemon talking, eighth Chubb "That was time to" should be "It" instead of "That". Same for "Well..That will be difficult"

What a touching chapter. Those feels man, those feeeeels.

Man, you're really helpful in this, i guess i have to review things like the it / that difference, and irregular words, some school things that vanished. ^^

I agree with this. If you're lucky you hatch a Pokémon that counts as a the bonus catch you mentioned.

Btw how are you going to handle dual types like Lotad? Is it only when you have access to both types that you can use them?

At first i wanted to have the access when i would have both badges , but thing is that i'll need a pokemon that can learn waterfall, so obviously a water type, and there is no gym for that. I also dont feel like wasting my extra pokemon for an HM Slave, so i guess i'll catch dual types that matches one of my badges IF they're pokemons that are not covered in the Episode 15 Release, so a XXX/Water , a XXX/Steel , a XXX/Rock , a XXX/Fairy and a XXX/Dragon if i have the badge corresponding to the other type

Lemme know how you're feeling about this system

This is brilliant absolutely love it, takes me back to pokemon mystery dungeon I can't wait to see all the dailogues that come up

Supporting is appreciated, don't hesistate to point what seems incoherent for you, i'll try to give a cool background story for each partners. It can take time for everyone here to appear in the run, but i'm planning on giving a role for everyone of you.

So adorable :3

gl with Florinia. Raiden and Chubb may be clutch

Well, i'm bringing good news as Florinia was defeated by the Rebellion Squad ! But well, Bessie is telling me how to write, and you can expect an update for today with full details about the fight, and of course, Chubbessie 's Confrontation.

Stay tuned guys

Also, Special thanks to Dragon116 who's more than a wonderful Tynamo but who is also a wonderful help in the run