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[Poetry / Feedback]: Sun and Snow


Cool Girl

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So, this is a poem that I have to write for homework. The requirements are that I have to write a poem about a Russian landscape, so yeah. Also, this is for Russian Literature class.

Your warm touch, your cold touch

That is you, Russia.

But, I find myself not knowing who you are

Your perverse affection intrigues me

A warm sun rises above your mountains.

Snow falls above your mountains.

The warmness and coldness touches my very soul,

But yet, I suffer through darkness.

I suffer through the coldness of my soul

Flowers and leaves withering, trees falling

Oh, the despair! For I am happy!

I have now seen your true colors

Mountains fall, but new life arises

Cold feelings like the snow, warm feelings like the sun

That is you, Russia.

Let me know what you guys think! Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

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An interesting poem. You depict the contrasting elements of the existing Russian landscape well, but you seem to incline the poem more towards lamentation, which I would assume would be the main idea of the poem; the poem mentions twice that the persona "is suffering through the cold", despite the warmth existing, only for it to resurface in the end, bringing it back to "there are two sides to a coin" thematic element, which personally is fine, but what was the main idea -- is the landscape supposed to be one that makes you sad or happy, or is it more of a neutral stance depicting its goods and bads?

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