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Well that was certainly a very very VERY long read but an enjoyable 1 as well. I liked how you mad Dounia and the Nurse Joy at the Grand Hall related. I like how her team as of now is kind of like cutesy. I'm glad Vulpix is back though. Was worried for the little fox Pokemon. Can't wait for the next episode to come out whenever that will be! 😄

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I only started reading Flannerys story today and I was so immersed in your writing, that i couldn't stop. It is a really good story so far and I like the way you combine the story of Reborn with your own. Especially the last three chapters got me emotionally. I was so glad that Torkoal didn't die and that Flannery managed to get Vulpix back. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work 😊

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Thank you all for your comments, this is really heart-warming to me! After all the time I spent on this, I'm glad you still enjoyed the story 🙂

And yes, this is a particularly long episode, but I wanted to make it so, because I wanted to draw a line on Flannery's Pokemon loss once and for all. Plus, I hope you enjoyed the battle against Dounia as well as Dounia herself. You can see her like a Heather software running on a young Nurse Joy hardware if you want. Well, to be more serious, Dounia has a rebellious nature by default, but is also very helpful with people who deserve her services, and most importantly, with vulnerable Pokemon. Also, you got it @J-Awesome_One! I originally planned to make her have a team based both on the cutesy theme and medical theme, which explains why she has Happiny as her ace Pokemon. And it's not over, I have more plans for her in the future of the run. Otherwise, I would have not revealed things about her past like I did. But in her case, being cute can be very misleading and lethal for her enemies. The three thugs of the flashback can testify!

 

  On 11/8/2019 at 9:41 PM, TheVentusX said:

I only started reading Flannerys story today and I was so immersed in your writing, that i couldn't stop. It is a really good story so far and I like the way you combine the story of Reborn with your own. Especially the last three chapters got me emotionally. I was so glad that Torkoal didn't die and that Flannery managed to get Vulpix back. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work 😊

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Thanks! This is very nice from you! 🙂

I hope you enjoyed the childhood arc too! I admit that the beginning can be very morose at first sight, but then, things become milder and milder, and I couldn't resist to develop it even more overtime. Since I like to insist on the psychology of the characters, I have a tendency to illustrate it with screenshots, so it's more easy for the reader to guess what the protagonists and antagonists have in mind, especially during long episodes 😄 Even if the story includes sad moments from time to time, I have to say it myself: I hate bad endings, but I hate linear stories even more. This is why I couldn't resist to make connections with various elements from Flannery's past as well as include some details from the manga, especially with Winona who can be quite supporting and protective at times. Since she's supposed to be Flannery's best friend, as well as my second favorite PokeGirl, I had to include her in the story too!

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Shadow Defender.... Shadow Rysing.... Whatever my name is at this point..... here...

 

This chapter was a welcome distraction. I enjoyed how you implemented an OC like Dounia, (I assume it's an OC) and tied her into the story while making her relevant. I wouldn't have ever guessed where that ability would of come from, so... Expectations subverted. Nicely done! Aside form that, Vulpix is safe! Yay! 

 

Good job on this episode. Now, the wait for ep. 18 begins...

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Thank you!

 

Yes, that was a lot of upstream work! And sincerely, I'm glad to be finally done with it! Also, since the creation of this episode included 88 edited picutres, plus one original character with a custom battle made entirely with RPG Maker XP, plus 34 pages of read on Word, plus an investigation part where the logic had to be kept from beginning to the end, plus Dounia's flashback that could have been put in a different episode, plus a bumpy return to computing studies, I definitely assume it was a work worthy of 3 months of wait. And even for myself, this episode was a thrilling experience, because in addition of making the story progress, I myself went further in Reborn as the player with my favorite Pokemon character. So I guess you trust me if I tell you that all this makes me feel good! Things are getting better and better as I keep writing and imagining the next part of the story. So, don't worry too much about the sequel. It probably won't have everything the 17th episode had. Apart from that, I will ensure that Dounia's prayer will be satisfied (Just like the expectations of the reader if you know what I mean 😉).

 

You'll see, Flannery is always on top. She never disappoints 😄

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It's about time justice got served on a silver plate! Thug numero uno really had that coming. Vulpix can be at ease now ^_^

 

Plot twist: Jacques jumped off the train at the Tourmaline Desert to pet the Absol seen in the intro of Reborn and now he's stuck there

 

Btw, I love the editing you've done. The burn/smoke effect is cool :3

Mystery Dungeon!

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  On 1/15/2020 at 9:59 PM, SilverAngelus said:

It's about time justice got served on a silver plate! Thug numero uno really had that coming. Vulpix can be at ease now ^_^

 

Plot twist: Jacques jumped off the train at the Tourmaline Desert to pet the Absol seen in the intro of Reborn and now he's stuck there

 

Btw, I love the editing you've done. The burn/smoke effect is cool :3

Mystery Dungeon!

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Thank you for the warmly feedback! ^^

 

Yes, that was delightful to me too! I wanted to do this since episode 15 and I've put more time than I should have in the conceptualization of this clash. I think it was worth the writing indeed! Flannery has often been pictured and shown as a shy girl with a hot temper who pretended to be someone she wasn't, but she's never been caught in the act of violent outburst. In the end, Dounia's wish came true, and Vulpix has been avenged! Everything is now as it should be. But regardless of who you are, nothing last forever. We may eventually hear more of Zigzagoon in the future. When I said he was fast, I insisted on it. Anything can happen in a written run 😉 As of episode 18, Jacques' fate is now the biggest mystery of the story. Who knows, maybe the police will find clues concerning him in Beryl Ward. Anyway, if you managed to guess what happened to our Reserve Gym Leader, so you're probably sounding my mind at this very moment! And yeah, Vulpix must be loved and cherished at all cost (Protecc Vulpix!). As for the visual effect, you got a point here! The smoke surrounding Pokemon defeated by Flannery is actually blurred flames that I edited and darkened with an desaturated filter by using Gimp. My biggest work on it was principally the shock waves emitted by Flannery's fist. I cropped the sparks of Luxray from Pokemon Mystery Dungeon (Luxio Tribe) when the latter was about to strike the fatal blow to the player and his teammate, and I turned it purple. The attention to detail was required for this part. And on the other hand, Flannery had to honor the promise she made to Winona. The Flying Type Gym Leader will probably be reassured now, and maybe she'll send news to Flannery as well 😉 I don't banish the possibility for her to possibly find her own Reserve Gym Leader, so we could eventually expect something great from Winona. Even if it means she will... oh, nevermind.

 

The work on episode 19 will probably start this week, so keep your fingers crossed until then 🤞

 

PS: Confirmed fact, Fern will appear in the next episode.

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That escalated quickly between Flannery and Fern. I wonder, if the man from the flashback was actual his grandfather, I wonder.

 

But anyway, I hope Flannery is ready for the next chapters. I wish her good luck😊

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That was a very pleasant read. I really like how all your characters ring true, even though you vary the situations they are put through (which is another very good point). Flannery... is as good as ever (I would have enjoyed another "fist of justice", but, alas, that would have been very un-Ambassador-like), while Fern's ambivalence is very well conveyed.

I am curious about how you'll make the next episodes look like. At least, there is little doubt that Flannery's previous experiences in fighting terrorist organizations will definitely help!

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  On 3/21/2020 at 4:13 PM, Evi Crystal said:

That escalated quickly between Flannery and Fern. I wonder, if the man from the flashback was actual his grandfather, I wonder.

 

But anyway, I hope Flannery is ready for the next chapters. I wish her good luck😊

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Thanks from the bottom of the heart! ❤️

You're right about the man in the flashback, he actually is Flannery's grandfather! The picutres you see are screenshots that I inserted long ago in episode 8 to depict Mr. Moore's battle against the challenger in Lavaridge Gym. I just edited and recolored them with filters, so I could represent the same scenes as ominous memories in the present timeline 🙂

 

  On 3/21/2020 at 5:34 PM, J-Awesome_One said:

Nice episode! I like that you changed where they meet as well. Can't wait to see what happens in the next episode. And I can't wait to see if Flannery catches a new team member too.

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Thank you, glad to see you appreciate it! 😄

And yeah, I know. I couldn't resist the idea of changing the place where they could meet. In fact, since Flannery's destination was already indicated by Ame, and since she knew she had a map application on her Pokegear, it wouldn't have made sense to me to take her to Blacksteam Factory. In my opinion, Julia's Gym was a more appropriate place for Flannery and Fern to meet each other, and this kept things logic all the way, Flannery having everything she needed to not go to the wrong destination 😉

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  On 7/12/2020 at 12:49 PM, Q-Jei said:

I will also let you sleep with me tonight.

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It’s cute that Flannery and Julia get along well. Given Flannery is a fire type leader I think she enjoys fireworks which go boom too. Speaking of, wonder how Flannery will react to Charlotte and her backstory.

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Nice to see this back up! Those boom effects are on point~ (Julia is very proud of you :3 ) 

 

As much as Meteor deserves consequences for their heinous actions, it's not pleasant to see Flannery so worked up about revenge. She's better than that ;-;

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  On 7/12/2020 at 6:42 PM, Candy said:

Lewd

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It’s cute that Flannery and Julia get along well. Given Flannery is a fire type leader I think she enjoys fireworks which go boom too. Speaking of, wonder how Flannery will react to Charlotte and her backstory.

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No worries, I'm satiated already 🙂 And yeah, Julia and Flannery tend to share some common points with each other, I give you that. However, there might be some subtleties between those two. Julia needs destruction to entertain herself in an inoffensive way while Flannery is more of a daredevil who loves doing things relentlessly and passionately but can't stand to be pushed over the edge. In Flannery's case, I would rather say that destruction is a means of last resort that has been used more than it was supposed to. Sadly, this tempestuous way to be was accentuated because of what she has been through in Reborn. Hopefully, she will "cool down" a little with what is supposed to come next. And yeah, she will definitely have an affinity with Charlotte. Being fire lovers themselves, they will get along well together. Plus, they both have family matters that might strengthen their friendship since Flannery is not that different from an orphan in some way.

 

  On 7/12/2020 at 7:48 PM, SilverAngelus said:

Nice to see this back up! Those boom effects are on point~ (Julia is very proud of you :3 ) 

 

As much as Meteor deserves consequences for their heinous actions, it's not pleasant to see Flannery so worked up about revenge. She's better than that ;-;

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And so I am 😄 All these edits were more fun to make than I would have thought actually! A nice booming for Julia ^^

And yeah, just like I said to Candy, Flannery's state of mind is not that enjoyable for everyone, which is normal in itself. The thing is, we know why she acted so harshly against thug numreo uno and the Meteor grunt. As we saw a few episodes earlier, her Pokemon and her life were endangered because of them the first day of her trip in Reborn. All the recent events combined have led to an increasing amount of impulsivity inside of Flannery, which have forced her to believe in absolute justice and apply it on her own. Having that said, I can't completely defend Flannery myself either. Otherwise, it would mean that her violent acting could become even more devouring and dangerous than it already was. In other words, she would become what Sirius wanted her to be. This raises some moral issues in the end. But if it can reassure you, I already have anticipated it as from episode 18. This sequence of raging outburst will eventually be attenuated in a very near future, don't worry!

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Another well written chapter about the little fire devil 😁 I like the way how Flannery talks with Fern, 'cause she tells him the things I would want to hear from our own MC, if he could talk, and the Fern in this chapter was even more dorky than the original one (how could he dare to try to blame Flannery for everything)😂 And even tough she needs to calm her anger sometimes, her hunting after the fleeing Meteors was one of the funniest moments of this chapter 😂 My favourite character combination in this chapter was Flannery and Julia, they are made for each other regarding their characteristics, Julia as the cheerleader of destruction and Flannery as the vulcan of emotions 😆 I can't wait for their battle against each other ☺️

 

Keep it up Q-Jei 🤘🏻

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Wow, I can't believe I managed to so completely miss the release of your chapter. 

It was pretty nice too, although I was quite surprised at Flannery's brutality -- it's well-motivated, of course, but it's still unsettling to see violence escalating this much.

(Although I believe she would have a very long way to go to be what Sirius would wish for her to be)

Your visuals are amazing too. 

 

I'm surprised that no one seemed to comment on Fern's behavior -- and how Flannery was perhaps slightly hypocritical when she complained about the blatant lack of empathy of men she had known. Fern's attempt to defuse and pass the bucket is, if somewhat thoughtless and cowardly, very human in my opinion. It was Flannery's choice to escalate violence to "I'll literally burn you" levels in the confrontation, without Fern's backing. That Fern decided to rather let her down rather than risk being burnt alive as retaliation isn't surprising (not heroic, for sure, but hardly callous). 

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  On 7/15/2020 at 12:20 PM, Evi Crystal said:

Jesus Christ! Flannery was pretty the savage one there.... It scared me, because Flannery would never do that in my opinion *shivers*

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I think it's precisely because this is the first time we see Flannery acting so nastily that so many readers are shocked by this episode in particular. With all the recent moments of violence and unfairness she's been attending to from the day of her arrival, it was pretty difficult for Flannery to stay cool and keep up the same level of toleration all the time. The more she was exposed to violent situations, the more she turned violent herself. But these situations are not just limited to Reborn. Otherwise, she surely would have behaved differently. Five years ago, during the clash with Team Aqua, she herself saw how far a devilish organization could go to achieve its goal. Needless to say, she's been through a lot. And still, I put it mildly. For those who didn't know, Flannery's past in TTOAF refers a lot to the manga which is itself particularly ominous and oppressing at times. It contains scenes that are at least as unsettling as the ones depicted in episode 20, and which at the same time, highlight Flannery's durability considerably. Let me give you some examples of what these scenes are about exactly.

 

 

And believe me, I didn't show you everything. This combined with Reborn's merciless environment, the chance for Flannery to go from love to hate in the presence of evildoers was legitimate and not negligible. Some might say it's a matter of choice to be good or evil through your actions. In Flannery's case, there was a point where she somewhat decided to stop holding back. But don't mistaken with what I wrote above. To me, what happened to Flannery during the raid in Mosswater Factory is a tragedy more than anything else, the creepy result of an infernal sequence of events she shouldn't have been involved in. And what makes it worse is that nothing she did is defendable. I freaking love Flannery myself, and it's a wrench to depict her like that. But somehow, this had to be done one way or another. Fortunately, the advantage of a character like Flannery is that she has several opportunities to grow up and learn from the mistakes she made as the story unfolds. In a future episode, she will eventually realize that the more she fought against injustice, the more ruthless she became. I'll stand by that: Flannery will never end up like Sirius, Tania or Saphira!

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Alright first of all I'm very happy to see a new chapter of yours and hope you're feeling and doing better now these days than before^^

 

Okay then, this chapter send me some spins down maybe because of said one picture and said flashback. Then I actually feared Flannery was going to be at jail, but luckily Doumia saved the day. For now at least...

 

Also her picking Torchic was such a sweet moment to say^^

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