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Should I keep uploading pictures for the chapters?  

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  1. 1. Should I keep uploading pictures for the chapters?

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    • Try and make less of them.
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  2. 2. Should I keep uploading pictures for main battles?

    • Yes, keep them about the in-game battles.
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    • Try and post some about how the battles are narrated.
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    • No, the story is self-sufficient.
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Making pictures is time-consuming, but the finale is almost over -- although you won't have it before a few weeks. If I'm staying in the "one per week" rhythm, that makes the last (Part 2) chapter on the day after Christmas. It may not be a read for Christmas anyway, so that's perfect. 

 

Anyway, here's a new chapter! Hope you'll enjoy it. 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 41: Fire Fighter

 

 

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  On 11/28/2020 at 3:53 PM, Mindlack said:

Days of madness. How could life have become so complicated so fast?

 

It used to be so simple. Find new class, start learning, get good grades. Find a project, get learning, be as thorough as you could, get a decent grade. What had gone wrong? I scoured my memories, trying to find a recent element, even a tiny one, that could explain how, why, it all started. But it was fruitless. It was as if I had woken up one day and got myself conscripted in a war, a desperate, losing one.

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I'm also wondering how Gabriel got himself into this mess at first place? He doesn't seem to enjoy his journey... It kinda makes me hate Florinia, the more I think about the martyr🙁

 

  On 11/28/2020 at 3:53 PM, Mindlack said:

Family issues... again? What kind of demented region was this, where no family could be harmonious, or at least somewhat so? Then again, perhaps I was oblivious to the defects of mine. Perhaps this was how my little brothers felt about me. And perhaps indeed I had been ignoring them too much.

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Well that's Reborn for you, buddy... I even lost count of  the amount of broken families😔💔

 

 

I can feel the drama coming closer and clooseeerr... Vicky....

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  On 11/28/2020 at 4:27 PM, Evi Crystal said:

I'm also wondering how Gabriel got himself into this mess at first place? He doesn't seem to enjoy his journey... It kinda makes me hate Florinia, the more I think about the martyr🙁

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Well, why would he enjoy that? Very few real people would, and an even tinier fraction of first-world math students. 

Don't blame Florinia for it, she's not exactly responsible for it, is she? If Gabriel can't just decide to remove himself entirely from this business, it's also his problem... 

(and don't start hating "ally" characters, you won't have enough left for the bad guys 😢)

 

About how he got himself into this mess... Well, there's a bit of a plot point here, that's why it's not explained. I guess it's also related to the fact that no one we've seen so far would be inclined to give even a hint, even for those who may know something. 

 

Also to be honest I haven't managed to figure out the exact details, although I have the main idea.

 

 

  6 hours ago, Evi Crystal said:

Well that's Reborn for you, buddy... I even lost count of  the amount of broken families😔💔

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It's really sad indeed. And then you wonder why so many of these people are nutcases. A healthy family is important!😢

 

  6 hours ago, Evi Crystal said:

I can feel the drama coming closer and clooseeerr... Vicky....

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I hope it won't be too predictable... despite this being a fanfiction of Reborn. But yes... winter drama is coming. 

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  On 11/28/2020 at 10:54 PM, Mindlack said:

Don't blame Florinia for it, she's not exactly responsible for it, is she? If Gabriel can't just decide to remove himself entirely from this business, it's also his problem... 

(and don't start hating "ally" characters, you won't have enough left for the bad guys 😢)

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I don't hate Rini to be honest (she's one of my favourite Gym Leaders). It just every time something bad happens to us (like Corey's suicide, Kiki's death and the orphan quest), I can't help it, but to resent her sometimes... Just like in my first playthrough back then... Oh how I cursed at her😅

 

Also the story is getting more interesting and more and more personality I'm seeing in Gabriel. Kudos for tou😉🙃💖

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  7 hours ago, sayar said:

But something which Gabriel saidadee wonder if he hasn't been dreaming this all along

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Interesting question. I wonder what gave you this idea? But that's not what I had planned. This is Reborn, not another popular fangame from this forum (which I won't name because sort of spoilers?)

 

  On 11/29/2020 at 4:19 AM, sayar said:

Amazing chapter

Having said that, I'm waiting for the next chapter!

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Thank you (don't sell yourself short though, we all have huge margins for progress).

 

  On 11/29/2020 at 11:01 AM, Evi Crystal said:

I don't hate Rini to be honest (she's one of my favourite Gym Leaders). It just every time something bad happens to us (like Corey's suicide, Kiki's death and the orphan quest), I can't help it, but to resent her sometimes... Just like in my first playthrough back then... Oh how I cursed at her😅

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Plot twist: she's actually the real antagonist this entire time.

Proof: she barely ever does something useful and instead embarks you in this ridiculous utter mess where you somehow narrowly escape death many times! 

 

  22 minutes ago, Evi Crystal said:

Also the story is getting more interesting and more and more personality I'm seeing in Gabriel. Kudos for tou😉🙃💖

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Thank you!

You'll probably see a few personality clashes in the next chapters. Who was it that said it took crisis times to unveil people's personalities? 

 

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  On 11/28/2020 at 3:53 PM, Mindlack said:

It's been almost two days since Cain left Reborn City to go here, but I didn't see him."

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Gulp. Oh god, I can help, but to be worry for the kids. Hope they are fine?😔👉🏽👈🏽

 Can... I have a little signal of themselves?🙏🏼

They better be fine or else I'll hunt two men down...

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To be honest, I didn’t think of adding a glimpse of the kids in the upcoming chapters (but I definitely should have, it’s a great idea). I’m a bit reluctant to do it now since they’re quite... remarkable lengthwise (the chapters, not the kids). 
 

So let’s just say for now that the kids aren’t much worse off than they canonically are. I apologize for the previous sentence not being very informative – if I have time I may write a “special chapter” about the kids (I think between chapters 43 and 44). 
 

I’ll do it sooner if as was “teased” on your profile, the Firehead story updates in less than a week. 
 

(PS: if you’re reading this Q-Jei, please take this as the bad joke that it is and nothing else). 

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I'm a terrible reader but I figured it's time to try changing that and so I've resumed (basically restarted oops) reading The Odd One.

Can't promise I'll be able to read on cause smol brain but for now I wanna say that I admire how well you've characterized your protagonist and show it in subtle ways. You say I've written my characters carefully, but I feel you've done a better job at that than me (cause I just play the story in my head, don't really think much of how it's gonna be structured).

 

I especially like these bits:

  On 10/15/2019 at 2:09 PM, Mindlack said:

"Well, I got my first Pokemon too and I'd like to test him. Are you okay with another battle?" she asked me. 
"I'd agree, but Leaf doesn't seem to be rested."
"She is, actually.", the nurse interrupted. "She looks very eager to accept, if I may say so."

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This one could've been a "wanna battle?" "sure", but adding Gabriel thinking his pokemon wasn't rested and being corrected by the nurse showed that he's a noob at caring for a pokemon.

 

  On 10/19/2019 at 9:35 AM, Mindlack said:

The best thing would be to make some list of absolutely necessary things to obtain by any (well, almost any) means. 
Let's see. A large bag with several compartments, some sort of notebook, pens, Pokeballs and Potions. Of course, snacks and water. Maybe clothes. And no cash squandering.

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This bit could've been omitted with "I went to the shop to buy some stuff" but Gabriel actually making a list is very like him (from what little I've seen). It's like he's getting ready for the worst. He's cowar- I mean, careful about looking after himself and his pokemon.

 

  On 10/19/2019 at 9:35 AM, Mindlack said:

Worst of all, there was a slight rain, and I hesitated to go on. It could be one of these so dreadful acidic rains.

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While most people would think nothing of the rain, Gabriel thinking it could be acidic again shows how careful he is not to make an uncalculated mistake.

 

Anyhow, story is great :) You don't need me to say this but keep up the good work~

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  On 12/2/2020 at 11:37 PM, Candy said:

I'm a terrible reader but I figured it's time to try changing that and so I've resumed (basically restarted oops) reading The Odd One.

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That's brave of you, because there's a lot to read! 😅 I hope you'll enjoy!

 

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Can't promise I'll be able to read on cause smol brain but for now I wanna say that I admire how well you've characterized your protagonist and show it in subtle ways. You say I've written my characters carefully, but I feel you've done a better job at that than me (cause I just play the story in my head, don't really think much of how it's gonna be structured).

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I'm not exactly sure what you mean here, which structure you're alluding to. Mostly I'm playing it out in my head too and wondering how Gabriel would react. I guess there's also a component of "starting to plant stuff that will help justify future plot developments". 

 

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(I wrote that chapter a year ago, I'm not recalling it fully, to be also honest, but at least somewhat well.)

 

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This one could've been a "wanna battle?" "sure", but adding Gabriel thinking his pokemon wasn't rested and being corrected by the nurse showed that he's a noob at caring for a pokemon.

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I don't recall wanting to show that 🤣 (but it's good it turned out this way). I think I decided Gabriel felt more like "yes but not really, is there an easy excuse out?"

 

(Also, thinking back on it, I feel surprised at how fast the early progress was -- even against opponents that shouldn't be noobs, such as Fern or even most of the other Trainers. But the story isn't about the beginning, no matter how it may seem). 

 

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This bit could've been omitted with "I went to the shop to buy some stuff" but Gabriel actually making a list is very like him (from what little I've seen). It's like he's getting ready for the worst. He's cowar- I mean, careful about looking after himself and his pokemon.

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I think my reasoning was along the lines of "he doesn't know if, or where, there is a shop where he can get something else than Potions and Pokeballs". But yes, he's careful about looking after himself and his Pokemon (and he may have read the wrong stories about being prepared too short a while ago). It's almost a shame that the plot rather forces him not to. 

 

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While most people would think nothing of the rain, Gabriel thinking it could be acidic again shows how careful he is not to make an uncalculated mistake.

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He's facing a horrifically polluted lake in a place he doesn't recall wishing to go to (or whose existence he doesn't remember at all). He's not usually that cautious, but he believes that this situation definitely mandates a higher degree of caution than "going care-free singing in the rain".  

(Also, you'll notice that these examples of caution are taken when he's rather free to act, under little pressure. This isn't going to happen that much after the very beginning.)

 

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Anyhow, story is great :) You don't need me to say this but keep up the good work~

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Thanks a lot! 

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  On 12/3/2020 at 9:06 AM, Mindlack said:

That's brave of you, because there's a lot to read! 😅 I hope you'll enjoy!

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Yeah I saw that you’ve pumped out 40? chapters 😂 I’ll do my best 💪

 

  On 12/3/2020 at 9:06 AM, Mindlack said:

I'm not exactly sure what you mean here, which structure you're alluding to. Mostly I'm playing it out in my head too and wondering how Gabriel would react. I guess there's also a component of "starting to plant stuff that will help justify future plot developments". 

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I’m talking more of having a clear reasoning for things that happen (to a character or that a character does) and backing it up with style (basically the stuff that I commented I liked in my previous post). Since I narrate what happens in my head like a movie and only have a rough idea of what kind of character each person is (OC sheets? Wat dat) I think I don’t do a good job placing little details that makes sense for any given character, especially because I have berry bad memory and tend to forget the characters’ past actions lol. Well idk if I’m making sense 😅 donut mind me, in any case it’s something I need to work on.


 

  On 12/3/2020 at 9:06 AM, Mindlack said:

He's not usually that cautious, but he believes that this situation definitely mandates a higher degree of caution than "going care-free singing in the rain".

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That’s right hahaha *slips umbrella into their bag*
... It’s like my mom says “you have a lot of knowledge but don’t apply it”. Maybe math geniuses have a higher order of brain than a berry smol candy. (Also I always felt like my self-insert, Candy Leiderhosen, had nothing in common with real life me, but “being reckless because did not think things through” is actually totally me 😅😅😅)

Also do you know if acidic rain would actually melt you? Asking for a friend 

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  On 12/3/2020 at 6:18 PM, Candy said:

Yeah I saw that you’ve pumped out 40? chapters 😂 I’ll do my best 💪

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Yes, it's sort of ridiculous. Part 2 ends on chapter 45, and that's about your chapter 22 or so? I think I have a lot of motivation to write when I'm feeling stuck at whatever else I'm doing, and I've been feeling rather stuck (at intervals) for a while, I guess. I rather worry about how big the fanfiction is eventually going to be. 

 

  On 12/3/2020 at 6:18 PM, Candy said:

Since I narrate what happens in my head like a movie and only have a rough idea of what kind of character each person is (OC sheets? Wat dat) I think I don’t do a good job placing little details that makes sense for any given character, especially because I have berry bad memory and tend to forget the characters’ past actions lol. Well idk if I’m making sense 😅 donut mind me, in any case it’s something I need to work on.

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To be fair, your job is harder than mine. I have one OC whom I visualize rather well, and as far as I've shown he's a blank slate in his interactions with the cast; you have several OCs (or characters with an added depth) with previous interactions (and animosity) and you have to keep all that in mind when writing. 

 

(I also forget some of Gabriel's past actions -- usually not what I put because I plan to make something with it).

 

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... It’s like my mom says “you have a lot of knowledge but don’t apply it”. Maybe math geniuses have a higher order of brain than a berry smol candy.

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Did you know that Newton once decided to stare at the sun for as long as he could (for science, of course -- he very nearly lost his eyesight for it)? That he'd swallow mercury in his alchemist's "research"? That Gödel, despite people feeling that calling him "the greatest logician since Aristotle" was underestimating him, saw conspiracies everywhere and starved himself to death? That Pythagoras hated beans so much that he literally wouldn't go through a field of beans to save his own life? 

 

In a word: math geniuses really are a bunch of utter lunatics. They're not role models. 

 

Gabriel isn't on that level though, he's good at math but not that good. He might be a little insane but nowhere near the renowned crazies. And he's not good at applying his own knowledge either -- except when the writer decides that it fits. 

 

(A certain advantage of being in Reborn with PULSEs -- Rejuv and uh... never mind would probably be even more insane -- is that "awesome but wouldn't actually work" ideas [the useless kind of ideas one can have irl] can actually be not discarded because something unlikelier is part of the universe)

 

(I'd also like to point out than if you ended up -- clueless as to the why and unprepared -- in a region such as Reborn, you probably wouldn't be as reckless as your namesake).

 

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Also do you know if acidic rain would actually melt you? Asking for a friend 

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I didn't actually know. I suspected that it shouldn't be too bad, but I wasn't sure, so I did some cursory research. 

Wikipedia basically says: "no way". It's too diluted, and the pH is about 4.0 (vinegar is much below that). However, the chemical compounds can be detrimental to health (heart and lungs apparently). I also found an EPA webpage saying that there's almost no wildlife in a lake with pH lower than 4, so the Azurine lake might perhaps not be so bad as to actively threaten the life of people outside it (some nasty health hazards seem very likely though).  

 

Addendum: the above is valid for actual acid rains on our Earth following known physical/chemical patterns. If acid rains were to occur in the "Rebornverse", there's no telling how bad it could get, especially if someone were to use PULSE tech to its fullest potential horrifically wrong. Remember that in canon, two PULSEs were enough to make the lake deadly. And remember that there are (in the real world) very, very nasty chemicals

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Oof, that finale chapter is actually tough to get right. And that's not taking into account the other reasons why I might be should be sort of am busy. But don't worry about that, the schedule hasn't actually changed: the end of Part 2 should be online by the end of the year (and probably a few days before). 

 

A little comment on the pictures: they sometimes don't reflect very well what I write because I'm not very good at graphics. I'm thinking of two recent examples: the top of Pyrous (this might become somewhat relevant in the next chapters, since... you know), and, in this chapter, the little house on the island. So if the pictures clash too much with the description, the description is right. 

 

Anyway... I hope you enjoy!

 

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Rlly awesome chapter 

I wonder what that piece of paper is...

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Also i think Gabriel needs to understand that Cain will always be annoying but he has gud intetions , heh

 

Waiting for the next chapter tk see the destruction of Aphophyll

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  On 12/6/2020 at 5:57 AM, sayar said:

Rlly awesome chapter 

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Thank you! 

 

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I think he’ll get the memo... eventually. He really doesn’t like that. 
 

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Waiting for the next chapter tk see the destruction of Aphophyll

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Did you really want to word it this way?🤣

But yes, that’s what’s coming now... but there’ll be a little twist. 

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When I read the part, when Cain got drugged and beaten, I wish I would kick their butt's right now. How dare they touch one of my husbandos?! *angry Crystal noises*

 

But then I got the mental picture of an A-Exeggutor being stuck at the small space of a room... I tried my best do laughing to much.

 

Therefore I can sense great despar in the upcoming chapter at Pyros Mountain. Hope Gabriel's mind won't be that much broken on this. Be gentle with our boi (though I sound like a hypocrite now)

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  On 12/6/2020 at 10:55 AM, Evi Crystal said:

But then I got the mental picture of an A-Exeggutor being stuck at the small space of a room... I tried my best do laughing to much.

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Honestly, I'm very surprised that I didn't see it written by anyone else beforehand. I only thought of it when I wrote Taka sending it out in battle, and realizing that it was, indeed, a bit too tall. 

 

  On 12/6/2020 at 10:55 AM, Evi Crystal said:

Therefore I can sense great despar in the upcoming chapter at Pyros Mountain. Hope Gabriel's mind won't be that much broken on this. Be gentle with our boi (though I sound like a hypocrite now)

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It's a finale. I'm almost obliged to raise the stakes and create some despair. I can't comment (yet^^) on how Gabriel will handle the events though. 

 

  On 12/6/2020 at 11:29 AM, sayar said:

ofc i know there's gonna be twist
the series can't end here right now, can it? LOL

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I meant twist, as in "it's not going to happen like in canon". 

 

  On 12/6/2020 at 5:33 PM, Evi Crystal said:

Well of course. Or else Gabriel is doing something stupid (no offense to Mindlack) and it's game over

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Just for that (no offence taken of course), I feel an overpowering urge to show that "not doing anything stupid" is nowhere near a sufficient condition to survive, given who the good guys are up against... but now's not the time to kill everyone off. 

No promises about next week, though.

 

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Hey! 

 

Hope you're all doing well. I had a pretty down week to be honest, but it's looking better now. And I managed to write the second draft of the finale, but perhaps I'll do it again because it's not good enough... 

 

Also, I decided to give a certain type of news earlier than planned. 

 

Enjoy! (I hope)

 

 

 

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Aaaah... Now I have mixed feelings right now. Thanks for making me emotional at the beginning😓

 

But it was another interesting chapter... And here we go... Good Luck

 

Well here goes everyone's sanity. It makes me so helpless, fill with despair and anger towards this.

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  On 12/13/2020 at 8:20 AM, Evi Crystal said:

Well here goes everyone's sanity. 

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Isn't the usual sentence "here goes nothing"? Granted, it doesn't make much of a difference in this particular case... 😢

 

  On 12/13/2020 at 8:20 AM, Evi Crystal said:

It makes me so helpless, fill with despair and anger towards this.

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I about felt this way when I watched a Reborn playthrough (before playing it). And it's certainly justified here... how can they destroy the PULSE when Solaris and his full Pokemon team is standing between them? How can they hope to make a difference?*

 

 

  On 12/13/2020 at 8:20 AM, Evi Crystal said:

Aaaah... Now I have mixed feelings right now. Thanks for making me emotional at the beginning😓

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You're welcome? You had been asking for news of the children for a while... It's a bit short, but I feel that it conveys at least some of their situation. I'm not sure about what your mixed feelings are about though...

 

 

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  On 12/13/2020 at 12:59 PM, Mindlack said:

You're welcome? You had been asking for news of the children for a while... It's a bit short, but I feel that it conveys at least some of their situation. I'm not sure about what your mixed feelings are about though...

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Well I got pretty emotional at the beginning and I'm a bit relieved, yet more worry... Doesn't matter. Why was Sigmund thinking allying with Team Meteor, huh? Why? He could've at least bring them back in the orphanage instead of the whole hostage situation at worst case... 

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  On 12/13/2020 at 1:27 PM, Evi Crystal said:

Why was Sigmund thinking allying with Team Meteor, huh? Why? He could've at least bring them back in the orphanage instead of the whole hostage situation at worst case... 

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There'll be another Sigmund bit soon enough, in perhaps five chapters? But it's complicated for himtoo, even if he's quite the bad guy...

 

Anyway, that is my 252nd post, a very round number on a Pokemon forum, isn't it? How fitting that it's also when I upload one of the chapters I have been most eager to write (although conversely, this means that I'll be more upset if I missed it... never mind). 

 

Before starting to read, please take a second to glance through Chapter 43 and refresh your memory. Please keep the situation in mind. And please try to think, if only for a short while, of what might happen. Of how it might be prevented. 

 

And enjoy! 

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 44: The Art of War

 

 

 

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And the plot has been derailed and I love it. This is the kind of stuff I live for in these screenshot/written Pokemon stories. I was half expecting this story to just go the way of canon, but the trick with Crowphet was brilliant. So was the battle with Solaris, it was tense as all hell and was made retroactively all the more so by the fact that the whole endeavor was a hair away from complete disaster.

 

 

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