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Time for the next chapter! This is definitely not at all clickbait, but there is still a bonus chapter (maybe a slight anticipation of what's in store for Gabriel, maybe somebody else's viewpoint) if someone solves the math problem in chapter 16. Or, you know, you could just wait and I'll probably post one anyway.

 

To be honest, that chapter is a bit of a short-ish filler. In my current outline, the action happens mostly in chapters 20 and 21, there's a slight pause, then the climax of the Beryl Arc (and Part 1) is set for chapters 24, 25, and 26. That's not set in stone though.  

 

And no, the title is in no way a horrific pun on a game I've only vaguely read about. 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 19: Biomass Effect

 

 

 

In retrospect, I was really amazed by all I did in order to delay my going to the Jasper Ward. I held a long training session, where I oversaw Mouse's evolution into a bulkier Herdier, and where I sped Antum, my Railway-originating Klink, and Sicy, the deceptive ice cream cone, up to a level where they wouldn't be too lost. The training session also resulted in Hex and Batley both evolving, making them more reliable, powerful, and sturdy members of my team, something which I would doubtlessly come to need in the Jasper Ward. 

 

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If I were honest with myself, I was starting to feel bad about delaying such an important assignment. I had been tasked to help with a growing threat against the very place I couldn't leave; if I played truant, it would become an existential threat, until it grew out of control altogether. 


Better a fighting death than a life in chains, they said. Had they thought about the same situation? Where death was the most likely short-term outcome either way? Where the choice was between death while fighting, and being squashed by a demented plant? 


Such gleeful thoughts, only made grimmer in the dwindling light, went through my mind as I was making my resigned way towards the north of the Peridot Ward, until I came to the first police blockade. I wasn't alone with the policemen, as there already was a very animated talk between them and some guy in a lab coat again -- was it a fashion accessory for would-be scientists?


"Look, we've let you in because you could help us, we've taken risks to protect you, you got one colleague in real trouble, and all you're telling us is that you got it wrong and you need to start over?" one officer roared, his animated face visible even in the scant lighting. 

"Listen, I'm sorry. I'm not saying I'm didn't do anything wrong, but someone just messed up my Pokegear with an untested app update that broke data collection. I'm confident I can get the analysis to run again in a couple of hours, it's nothing?" the scientist replied. 
"And how many comrades are we going to need to sacrifice for that analysis?" the policeman almost sneered. "If even it's going to help us. You've had your chance and you wasted it. You're not coming back." the policeman went on, annoyed. 


The scientist looked dejected. He tried to keep looking at the policeman, to keep protesting, but he wasn't really convincing, and it was plain that the policemen wouldn't even make eye contact. The scientist noticed me and my puzzled look and commented simply: 


"It's a shame. Somebody's been releasing an untested app update on the Pokegear. I was trying to run some data analysis about... the situation in Jasper. But the update caused everything to reboot, wreaking havoc on the config files and the metrics. So they booted me out. At least", he added bitterly, not noticing my dismayed expression, "everyone will know about the Factory Field, as long as the update didn't erase that data."


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I didn't get the chance to answer, as the policeman turned to me. 
"Yes?" he asked in a weary voice. "What's it about? Jasper is off-limits for now, it's too unsafe."


I took a deep breath, and answered with a very unconfident voice:
"I was sent by Florinia. I think I'm supposed to assist you with the plants, or something?"
"I heard about that. They're saying you put an end to the floral kerfuffle in Obsidia?"
"It was dumb luck." I replied quietly. "I'm not exactly sure what you were told, but if I can advise and assist, I'll do it. I'm not very confident about managing to do it again."
"Advise and assist?" the officer chuckled humorlessly. "There's little to assist or advise. What do you think there is in the Jasper Ward?"
"I heard that," I started, uneasy, "the plants had devastated it?"
"These are merely words." the scientist, the presence of which I had forgotten. "I can't tell you about it. It's... more than a sorry set-up, it's a nightmare. "
"The Beryl Ward is where it all started. Of course, it's even worse there." the policeman completed. "Like in Obsidia, plants started going crazy all of a sudden. But we couldn't catch it early in Jasper and Beryl, as you somehow managed. And we can't evacuate the trapped citizens here -- you'll see why. We have only three purposes. Watch each other's back, keep civilians out, and stop it all. That's why we're glad to have you here."


What were they expecting? That I stepped in, and managed to singlehandedly destroy a monstrusouly powerful machine that could devastate an entire neighborhood?
 

But the question went deeper: what had Florinia been thinking? She had to have known my mission would be of the "locate and destroy" rather than any kind of advice. Had she deliberately misled me? It was, alas, entirely plausible. 

 

Fully aware that I was heading past the likely point of no-return, that it was likely to be my literal funeral, I said, in a dull voice: "I'll come." Because I knew that there just wasn't a safer option. 


"I'm on watch here." the policeman answered, pointing behind him. "The Ward is about a mile and a half past there. Don't worry too much about the vines until you get near the broken buildings, but don't go poking the vines either, because they're real nasties when taunted."

 

What little guts I had were making themselves scarce, as I walked on, very worried. At first, the area was desert, without any construction, and very little flora, mostly small bushes and patches of grass, without any sign that everything was amiss. Then, as I went on, abnormal manifestations of flora would become increasingly frequent, such as vines as tangled as bushes, or heavy immobile vegetal tendrils, completely supple and woodless, lying on the ground. 


These modest displays, as I was striding nervously in the slight twilight light, were steadily growing, first to pine tree-shaped vine tangles that were taller than me, then to assemblies of such structures, linked by multiple aerial vines, wider than tree trunks. These seemed to be the ultimate gall on the Jasper Ward. 


When I reached the Ward, I realized what the police officer and the scientist meant. It was horrific. It was insane. It was... mind-breaking. It was, I thought, like seeing a prosperous ancient kingdom being pillaged and ruined in less than a day. But it was more than that: it had to be your place, the one you've alwys lived in, its culture and ideals which were your mind's roots and sape... All of them reduced to naught, broken, defeated... Obliterated. Reduced to mere entropy. 


For centuries, mankind had striven to master nature, to learn the secrets it had gathered due to chance, to duplicate and improve its processes, to make it harmless, to turn it into a tool... Lately, the mindset had somewhat shifted, and nature had been let be, but nature claiming lives or property was still an anomaly, or an "act of Arceus", an error to be taken care of. 


And here, nature had taken action, struck back at civilization, and reclaimed its land. More than a few parts of my brain flashed yet-unknown alarm signals, knowing the event was but a prelude to a collapse of home, that I would need to search for a welcoming cave somewhere near, for fear of what came out at night... 
 

Don't forget it could as well have been PULSE-wielding Meteors, I tried to force my brain out of its crash mode. 

 

The Ward was... invaded, there wasn't really another word. Most of the buildings were either broken in half, the once-higher part lying, massive and inaccessible, near them, or plain torn to pieces. There usually were several of these vine camps around each inhabited piece of debris, threateningly waving at nearby people, such as myself, even though there wasn't any wind. It felt as though these vine camps were the foreguard of an occupation army. But, as any foreguard, they weren't alone. Middle-sized trees had seemingly sprouted as fast as mushrooms, and were everywhere, making moving in the broken town difficult and hazardous. 


Flora's army, reclaiming its land.

That sounded nice in my head. Maybe there could be a story about that. 

 

One of the very few buildings not destroyed was, ironically, the police station. I assumed I had to go there first, to hear about the situation, or objectives, even though I knew there rather weren't any. Regardless, I needed to make my presence known, if only so that, if it went wrong, they knew they would have to search for me. 
The police station hadn't been destroyed, but it had incurred some damage. The walls were cracked, the windows had been shattered and fixed with cardboard, and the power was out, so there were a few candles, dimly lighting the room. Only one person was inside, sitting at a prominent desk, with one ominous candle on each side, their elbows on the desk and their head in their hands. Nevertheless, they noticed my entering at once and said with a clear voice, and a practised tone:

 

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"Greetings." he drew his hands out and faced me. "I am the Chief of the Reborn City Police Department. Although civilians affairs are of the highest importance to me, I am afraid I cannot take any requests at this time. Our force is already highly overextended, and I am afraid that we cannot spare the manpower at this moment. Especially with more missing turning up each day."
"It's not about that," I answered shily. "I think you've been told about me, I'm..." I took a deep breath. "I'm the one Florinia..."
"Oh, yes." he answered. "In this case..." he took a closer look at me. "Look, I'll give you the picture."


He stood up, and took the cardboard protection out of the left window, and pointed it at me. 

 

"Six full days ago, the inhabitants of the Beryl Ward, northeast from here, woke up with a plant army inside the Ward. There was an understandable mad panic, but we managed to relocate most of the inhabitants to the Jasper Ward, and stockpile supplies there. However, we weren't able to stop the plants, and they ransackled Beryl. So we focused on building defense lines at the border, places where plants couldn't grow."
"We had to pour massively damaging chemicals on the ground, which was of course, a disgusting thing to do, but the plants were so aggressive that we only thought of defending that line. And then..." his expression went sadder. "The night of the attack on Grandview Station, the same thing happened to the Jasper Ward. We were busy with the investigation and couldn't take the same measures. The plant army grew in the Malchous Forest, westwards, in the night, and by the time we were aware of it, it already was even stronger than in Beryl..."

 
His voice broke and his head lowered, as in shame. 

 

"We couldn't even evacuate everyone. So many coordinated vines were uprooting buildings, and smashing them on the ground, or just tearing through them until they broke in two or collapsed... And they assaulted us when we tried to get close, to try and save the inhabitants. They still do that." He now looked down, and weary. "Every day since, we've sent men to look and rescue survivors. And each time, less come back."


God

 

"If ever they so decided, they could wipe the Ward out without us being able to do anything. I'm not too sure why they haven't. At least," he sighed, "many citizens were asked to stockpile, so there's a good chance that part of the citizens trapped in their homes are alive. "
"Do you think they're natural," I asked, "or that, as was the case in Obsidia, someone is manipulating the plants?"
"I've lived for a while, and it's the very first time I hear about such a situation." the police chief answered. "And the plants' reactions... don't feel too alien. I'm inclined to think somebody's pulling the strings."


"That's probably a stupid question, but why didn't you set the plants on fire?" I asked, curious. After all, I had been scared to use fire in Obsidia, but the situation was worse here.
"We've decided that it wasn't worth burning all of the trapped civilians alive. That a blaze strong enough to halt the invasion was very likely to spread to the rest of Reborn City."


"So", I asked, as I felt I couldn't delay it anymore. "What can I do to help?"
"What can you do?" he commented, chuckling humorlessly. "Well, you can try and locate the source of the infection and shut it down. I would also like you to find some police officers which have gone missing in Jasper or Beryl."
"You're basically telling me : 'do or die'." I pointed out. I wasn't sure about how I felt about that. Very uneasy, for sure.
"Well," he answered darkly. "You're on Reborn City's last defence line against a plant assault. We're outnumbered and outmatched. If they win here, it's probably going to be over. So it's do or die for all of us."

 

 

 

 

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It's time for a new chapter! As advertised, we get a bit of action in this chapter. Will Gabriel manage to defeat the Jasper PULSE? Or maybe find an unexpected way out of the situation?

 

Also, I can't help but notice that the view counter keeps going up but nobody actually commented since about ten chapters ago. I'm assuming that some people go on reading but maybe there isn't any?

 

Did I say/write the wrong thing somewhere? Is my protagonist boring, too unrelatable or too repetitive? Is the text too lengthy or too predictable? Is my English some Frankenstein-like linguistic zombie that devours the brains of anyone reading? Did you all leave when I started mentioning math? Are my pictures (or puns, or titles) repellent instead of merely clumsy? 

 

Anyway, here is the chapter:

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 20: F for Effort

 

 

 

I felt dejected after leaving the police station. My assignment had been ill-defined from the start, but I wondered if I didn't actually prefer the ambiguity, as I was tasked with an impossible job. Worse, it was a matter of life or death. In stories, such situations made the lead character do their best, and pull off impossible feats of wit, stamina or strength. I mostly felt hopeless, and started wandering the Ward. 


Very quickly, I found myself walking away from the forest, in the wrong direction, barely aware of what was around me. As I was directly under some tree, I felt some sort of drop fall on my head. Putting distractedly my hand in my hair, I actually found something. Something smelly, colored in a foul dark green. Something thoroughly unnatural...


I took two quick steps away from the tree, as an Alolan Grimer dropped from it. It seemed surprised to land on the pavement instead of somebody's head, but it recovered almost instantly from the shock and tried to leap at me. I managed to get Baby between the Grimer and me, and it took only a few moves to make him back off. I thought it was over, but I heard a Pokeball coming out and a Mudbray appeared. 


So somebody was sniping at me? Luckily, while the Pokemon seemed gifted, Baby and Mouse were more than a match for it and it didn't take long for them to win. I backed off, expecting the owner of the Pokemon to show themselves. 


"Damn", someone said from somewhere with a male, annoyed voice, maybe from one of the broken alleys around. "I'm not playing anymore. Show yourself." 


Fear fell upon me. I wasn't enthusiastic at the idea of being identified -- after all, he could, and probably would take out his defeat on me. I wasn't eager to start running either. Not only did the cracks and the vines make the ground treacherous, but I would also have to expose my back, which (according to stories, at least) wasn't a great idea. So I decided to hide behind the trees from which the Grimer had jumped, paying cautiously attention to my surroundings, including upwards. 


Fourtunately, there was nobody there, and I was able to observe my former opponent as he came out of hiding. I felt a terrible apprehension rise in my throat when I recognized the dark grey uniform and the black hood. Meteors. How great.

 

From a more positive outlook, however, this finding increased the possibility that another, similar, but more developed, PULSE, was to blame for the situation. It probably wasn't some Ent uprising.


The Meteor took some sort of walkie-talkie -- that was so well-planned, why didn't I have one -- and spoke words of dread, still while looking around. He didn't seem to see me, who was hidden against a tree and trying to peek. 

 

"There's a suspicious person in the area. They're a Trainer, with at least a Loudred and a Herdier. Not too bad. Over."

 

A buzzing noise was all I could make out. The grunt put the device against his ear and waited. 

 

"No, I think not. What are the instructions?"

 

Noises again. 

 

"Roger that." he put the device away. 

 

Then he turned at the trees and spoke loud and clear.

 

"I didn't hear you escaping, whoever you are, so you're probably there, even though I can't see you. I would get away from that place right now if I were you." As if it were so simple. "The plants are going to rip what's left of that place to shreds." Oh no. "They're all going to die, but you don't have to go with them." 


These words froze me. I tried to get away from the grunt, still remaining under tree cover, but didn't succeed. He was too close, and the tree strip wasn't wide enough. 

 

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"You know, you can come out, I pretty much don't care, I've done my job. But you've been spotted. We'll look out for you now. We'll ambush you and defeat your purpose, whatever it is."


And I was trapped behind the trees, as I didn't want him to see me. But I couldn't remain much longer playing peekaboo. So I took a candy bar to give me some courage, and moved as silently as I could out of the tree line, on the side of the police station. The grunt kept his eye on the trees, and, very nervous, I walked until I was sufficiently far from him to be hardly seeable, as it was almost night, then ran into the next alley I could find. 


That had been much too close. But I had gathered valuable information. Which the police probably already had, my inner skeptic commented. Regardless, this was heavy evidence favoring the theory that this plant uprising was similar to the Meteor-engineered one back in Obsidia. Therefore, I should be looking for a PULSE.


The Chief had stated that the assault had come from the forest. The logical conclusion was that I should look for this hypothetical PULSE there. Or that I let the actual people whose job it is to protect the inhabitants, the policemen, handle it. They probably already knew about it anyway. 


There wasn't a real way to the forest. In what seemed like the main path, many trees had grown, and nasty-looking weeds, the offspring of the unearthly plant growth, were occupying the rest. So I went to the forest by a winding route. It took me in dark alleys, led me to have Wolfgang cut a few trees, plunged under ruins of fallen buildings (although I tried to minimize that part, as the atmosphere there was oppressive and I was forced to find my way by feel, as it was darker than the night), but I was able to get there. 


And then I realized why the police hadn't been able to break the PULSE. 

 

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The Malchous Forest was... more than invaded by the PULSE-bred plants. It was more than taken over. It was... colonized, there hardly was another word for it. Countless vines formed as many layers of fortification. I felt at a loss. Who was I to stand a chance against such numbers? Such odds? And yet, someone had to do this. Maybe the plants wouldn't react too aggressively if I just slipped by? 


I started making my way in this very dense, quite oppressive, new vegetal environment. The vines resisted pressure, but, not without effort, I was able to push them one by one, and thus progress through the forest, towards the hypothetical location of the hypothetical PULSE, deep in the woods. But my advance was slow and difficult, and, while I was growing more and more tired, the plants were starting to organize, bracing themselves to resist my push, or waving so threateningly that I didn't want to try and antagonize them too much. As a consequence, my way was anything but straight (something which the very irregular layout of the vines and the darkness made very difficult in any case). 


After over an hour of asserting myself against one plant, and the other, my arms and back were protesting so much that I couldn't take it anymore and had to make a stop. I stood against a luckily placed lone tree and tried to rest my strained muscles, while getting my breathing in order. 


The forest was quiet and dark, all the more so because of the high density of thick tree trunk-shaped vines and because the night had completely fallen. It hadn't been light exercise I had been doing, and this drove me to doze off. It was so surprisingly peaceful... No cold wind, I wasn't too chilly, if a bit sweaty, due to my physical effort... The buzzing of bugs in the distance... They went wherever they liked... A great life...


As, while falling asleep, I subconsciously focused on these inconsequential sounds, they seemed to become more and more noticeable. They were hardly a distant buzzing at first, then I managed to half-consciously make out several patterns, based on small pauses and pitch of the vibration, then I started hearing air rushing to my ears, then I saw a darker shape before my two-third unfocused eyes... 


The air hissed. There was the sound of a brutal impact on something soft, and a moan, all of which jolted me awake. I started when I realized that, not two feet from me, a fallen Beedrill was lying motionless, the abdomen flattened and leaking yellowish blood, its delicate legs twisted at impossible angles. I cautiously knelt near the Pokemon, but it looked beyond saving. I started to feel nauseous. And then terror rushed. 


I had to leave this instant.

 

"Bugger. Couldn't it wait two minutes?" someone with a feminine voice nearby complained in my back. 
Adrenaline rushing, I turned back, trying to see who was there. I only could see a dark shape, at the very edge of the tiny clearing around the tree. 
"I know you're there. You've escaped us once, but you won't make it far from here. You are trapped."
 

I needed time to think, I realized. To get my mind back. To process information.

 

"Who are you?" I asked, with a stressed out tone. 

There was a second's worth of silence, then the voice answered again. "I remember you. You were the useless guy that attacked the factory. We've warned you, and you're not going to escape a second time."


Crap. A Meteor. It would be really dumb to engage her on a terrain she so thoroughly was in control of, so I had to leave fast. I called Wolfgang out. 
"Start cutting a way through the vines", I whispered to him. "Try going in... that direction" I added, pointing roughly at where I thought was the Jasper Ward.


I felt a draft near my neck, on my left. Something had been flying very close to me, but too fast for me to see. There was only one good counter. 
"Batley, please force this flying Pokemon off me. Confusion!"

 

The Swoobat got out of her Pokeball, soared in the air and quickly identified her target, as it was the only other flying Pokemon close by. It attempted to target the unprotected Wolfgang, who was bravely cutting his way through the unbelievable tangle of increasingy agitated, and angry, vines. However, Batley flew straight at the Pokemon, and the Psychic attack seemed to quite damage it, as it broke off and tried to flee towards me again. 
Batley didn't leave the Golbat the time to have a bite at me, and took it down with another Confusion. Whew.

 

I started walking towards the path Wolfgang had created, but I realized that my feet were almost glued to the grass. 
"A commendable aerial battle," the Meteor commented. "However, I can only recommend that you learn to better watch your surroundings. One might," she added, and could hear her smile, "find it easy to land a String Shot on you."
 

Double crap. I could see her now, with my impediment it would be easy for her to take me as a prisoner or hostage or something, if not straight out murder meArceus. I tried to take the string off me with my hands, but it was too sticky and I barely managed to free my hands (returning to the status quo), which were so sticky that they could probably retain water now. 


I had to do something. "Something" finally amounted to a desperate thrashing around with my legs, hoping against hope I could free myself, hoping that the string wasn't made for my weight class. And fortunately, it wasn't and gave way. I instantly ran for my life, in the path Wolfgang had created. The weakened string couldn't hold my feet again to the ground. It couldn't compare to the desperate energy terror was filling me with. And when I caught up with Wolfgang, I managed to push the plants out of my way with more desperate strength than I previously had, using only my elbows and legs for fear of finding myself glued to a plant. 


But the adrenaline-fueled energy ran out more quickly than I had hoped. I was out of breath, every plant was harder to push around than the previous one, many of them were fighting back, trying to swat me aside like a frail Beedrill, and I had to watch in every direction, duck, push back, or simply take the blow where it wouldn't hurt too badly. Worse, Wolfgang was growing tired and I recalled him. It probably took forty grueling minutes, where I had to focus on my breathing before I got out of this nightmare, and managed to catch a break against a broken building. I was back in the Jasper Ward. 

 

My legs ached by the effort they had made to fight the glue in the String Shot and the dash on the unequal ground of the forest. My arm muscles and my back were sore due to all the vine pushing around, added to my previous injuries. My neck was aching due to all the moves I had had to do to avoid getting hit in the head. The rest of my body was hurt on general principle, pretty much everywhere. My hands felt sticky and dirty. 


I was so tired I probably could have passed out on the spot, but a man's screaming prevented me from doing that. It came from inside this very building I was standing against. 

 

At such a strange angle, being inside the building felt a bit like exploring underground ancient ruins. The structure was made of different rooms, rather open to one another. It was pitch black, so I had to call on Leaf, for her Flame Charge to periodically light up the place. Sound also tended to echo a lot, a very disturbing occurrence which made locating the plea's origin harder. However, the building ultimately wasn't very big, and I finally found the screaming person. 

 

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They had good reason. They were wrestling with an ugly, massive, and highly aggressive Alolan Raticate, that felt like eating them (or at least, it looked this way). For some reason, they were lying on their back, struggling to not let the Pokemon get at their vital organs. I didn't think and tried to kick the Pokemon away with my full body's weight, something that should have worked beautifully. I got the Raticate in its fat flank instead (I didn't dare aim at its face and big, ugly teeth), and barely dislodged it. 


Furious at being deprived of its meal, it leaped at me. Panicked, I stepped backwards, tripped over some debris, fell on my back, and could only witness in naked terror as it sprung at me. Instead of eating my face, it was beautifully intercepted by Leaf, which was originally making light, but whom the repeated Flame Charges had considerably quickened. She delivered a vengeful Double KIck to the rat monster, fainting it. 

I rose to my feet, every part aching now, and trembling in tension. But I still knew what to do. 

 

"Are you okay?" I went asking the man. I noticed he had bruises all over his face, a few with dried blood, including a black eye, and that he was wearing a torn blue uniform. The logic asserted itself. "Are you a police officer?"
"I am brused and bitten, but I'll manage." he panted. "I was kidnapped by a Meteor. He threatened to have his Raticate eat me if I moved. When he went away he left his rat guard me. I tried to run, it attacked me, and you came. Thank you."
What a dreadful fate it would have been, I thought. 


"Can you get up? There has to be a way to the police station. You'd be safe."
"I know... a shortcut." he panted less heavily, mastering his breathing again. "Help me up."

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  • 2 weeks later...

I really don't know if anyone reads this, but I guess I'll still post the chapters anyway. As again, any feedback or comment (even on significantly older chapters if you don't want to read it all in one go) is appreciated. 

 

So... as suggested by the status update, I've finally finished my first version of part 1, with 27 chapters. It ends more or less after Corey's Gym. What I am realizing is that this story is becoming, um, huge. I can't give a precise estimate, but it's topping 100 pages without question, maybe in the 130s or even more. 

So, when you write something this ludicrously long, you need a better title than "the odd one out". To stress the door-stopper characteristics, I was thinking of moderately amusing stupidities such as "Lords of the keys" or "War and Pieces". If you've got better ideas, I'm interested. 

 

Also, due to attachment size limits we're hitting, I'll be using imgur from now on. I'm not sure I grasped how it worked, but we'll see...

(Final Edit: With proper help, I finally managed to embed the images)

 

This long, plot-relevant (finally) chapter is the first, I think, where I'm adding "Player's notes" for battles, where I explain what happened in-game, which is (for the rest of part 1, at least), far less action-heavy (and uncertain) than the written version. 

 

And now, it's far past the time for:  

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 21: Play Pretend

 

 

The vine moving had been very intense exercise, of the kind I wasn't accustomed to (I would have to do something about it), and therefore, as we reached the police station, I fell in the nearest armchair and passed out. It reportedly took the chief several minutes to get me awake, so that he could get my account. I told him everything I had encountered, from the Meteors, to the half-artificial plant forteress in the forest, about the ambush, how they had nearly taken me, how I escaped. The other officer supplied the details about how I (well, more Leaf than I) ended up saving him from the Raticate. 


It was, I argued, strong evidence in favor of the existence of a "PULSE" similar to what had been set up in Obsidia. That knowledge, however theoretically interesting, was of little practical use, because it didn't really impact the actions we could take. The forest, the place we had to investigate, remained impenetrable, and there didn't seem to be any move we could make. We couldn't dig a tunnel, because we would have to break through sturdier vines and roots. There hardly was a way around, and it seemed a very risky gambit to believe the other directions wouldn't be well defended. We didn't have anything that could air-take us to the heart of the forest.

 

Wait a second.

 

"Do you have some sort of camera?" I suggested. "At daybreak, my Swoobat could carry it over the forest, so that we can get pictures, or footage, of what is happening? Maybe it's going to be blurred or out of focus, but we could get something interesting?"


I got a round of astonished looks. 

 

"We don't have the material for this. Filming gear is too heavy, and we can't develop photographs here." was the consensus, and the discussion went on. Right, so we were low-tech... I missed my more "civilized" phone. What were we going to do?

 

"I think I'm going to sleep for a while." I answered. "I've been awake for long now, and I think I'll get better ideas in the morning."


The policemen weren't exactly pleased with my choice, but it was more than late and I was quite exhausted, and not in the mood of listening. When I was waken up with sore muscles, (five hours were generous of them, they said, in such an emergency), it was quite early in the morning, and dawn was barely approaching. The officers that had remained active had monitored the situation around the Ward and had provided alarming news. The plants were heavily developing southwards, towards the still intact parts of Reborn City. 


Energetic action, it was agreed, was required. While outright arson was still out of the question, it was decided that an entire squadron of policemen (along with me, unfortunately) would make their way in the forest, with the intention of locating and destroying the PULSE. 


Here was the catch, though: the officers would be in contact, but still dispatched in different parts of the forest, to force the plants split their force and focus. The rationale was that, according to my account and their observations, several people in a compact group would offer a much easier target. Of course, the actual officers had been given weaponry (more like a machete), and fuel and matches, with instructions to "use it responsibly". Of course, I hadn't been given any of these. After all, I hadn't been properly instructed on how to use them. It was, of course, the responsible decision about me on their part. After all, I could set myself on fire, or cut myself. Or worse, cut somebody else up. 


However, wrestling my way in the forest, I couldn't help but feel I was but bait, contributing little. Or even worse than bait, a sitting duck, waiting to be shot. Whatever "shooting" meant in this case. This suited so much better my still hazy mind and my wish to remain relatively safe. 


Forcing the tall vines (they had grown to over seven feet) to bend in approximately the way I wanted them to, especially in the darkness preceding dawn, was a straining task, all the more so since they were more antagonistic than in my previous visit. Fortunately, it was more of a passive resistance than attempts to squash me. As I wasn't exactly the cornerstone of the operation, I was satisfied with keeping a low profile.


The forest seemed endless. I had lost track of time (not that I really had kept track of it earlier), wrestling my way into the forest. My already dirty and sweaty clothes hadn't improved, and I was feeling quite wet, and lost in a uniform field of vines. I didn't even know where to go, except as a vague direction that probably didn't indicate anything any more. 


Of course, thinking of what to do, at a time when I was already feeling too weary for anything not nap-related, I started reminiscing. About stories. About characters lost in the wilderness making their way back. But as I recalled them, there usually was some sort of knowledgeable (if not always with good intentions) guide, somebody knowing nature inside out. If not, they usually had a bit of equipment, or transportation available. What would such a person have done? But I couldn't answer that; I would prove myself to be just as knowledgeable as they were if I could. They would have some experience to base themselves on, some overview they could apply...

 

Some overview...

 

I had suddenly found my next short-term objective. I would have to find an actual tree, climb it a bit, and try to see how deep the vine walls were, if I could reasonably go through them. Cheered up by this shift in purpose, I put my bag back on my shoulders, and starting to push my way through the colonizing vines, ignoring my muscles' protests. As I was progressing, the vines were pushing back harder and harder, but I would then manage to slip between them, and not look behind. Indeed, the vines, when returning to their normal position, were so fast they would overdo it and bang together with frightening strength. Anything between them would be squashed to a pulp. 


Still obsessing over this vision of horror, I finally managed to find a tree after much effort, before even dawn was breaking. Even though it thankfully had low enough branches, it was harder to climb it than I had expected and I managed it. Once sufficiently high up, I found out that I had been lucky. The vines indeed covered the woods as far as I could see, and there only was a large uneven circular area, maybe half a kilometer away, where the forestry looked sparser. It would be pretty easy to miss, if one went in the wrong direction. I had no idea where the other officers were, and the light wasn't sufficient to see them. For all I knew, they could still have been wandering the vines anywhere. 


I didn't want to jump down from the tree. My gray surroundings were reminding me of existential questions, such as "what was I doing here?", or "what's the point anyway?" or "Arceus I'm tired, I'll nap right there and let the policemen sort it out". That it wasn't my fight. That it might be easier to try and reach Kalos back on foot. 
 

Who was I kidding? I'd pretend to see the job through anyway. 
Just not until dawn
, I thought. Let me rest till that. 
 

I just sat and watch till the sky became lighter, revealing clouds. If I were sufficiently unlucky, it would be raining, strengthening the plants and weakening me, as well as Leaf. But I forced myself to focus back on my task, as I had exceeded the rest time I had allocated myself. Eyes focused on the clear area, I climbed down from the tree and started muscling my way through the thick vine jungle. It was a harrowing session of over an hour, pushing one plant and then the other, always being watchful, ducking the occasional resentful vine, seldom letting my arms down, but I managed to reach the clearing, at the lower end of a bank. I chided myself for not noting that, but immediately thought up a convenient excuse -- it had been dark. At least, while I was climbing the bank, my arms could get a well-deserved rest. 


Of course, it came as a shock when a young man in casual clothes, looking much more confident than I was, seemed to appear out of thin air before me as I was walking up the last part of the slope. Who was he? Had he been somehow expecting me? But how? 


"Gabriel, right?" he asked, tone casual, almost friendly. 
"How do you know?" I asked, shaken. 
"I figured you'd end up around here."
"Why me? I'm hardly the only one searching the forest." I answered, trying nonsensically to nitpick the other's certainties rather than ask the interesting questions about who he were, and how he knew me. 
"No," he answered, "but you're not the one facing unexpected plant resistance, and, I suppose, Bug Pokemon webs. My name's Taka, by the way."

 

This alarmed me even more. How could he have known about that, unless... And in that case, the best thing to do was to let him talk, watch my back and watch my mouth.

 

"Would you mind following me? There's something I would like to show you."
"Sure, why not?" I answered mechanically, even though it felt ominous. He had been polite enough and the request seemed harmless. 

 

We walked very little until I saw it. It was a PULSE Tangrowth, just like in Obsidia. Except that it was more twisted. It was bulkier, but even more difform, and frankly uglier. And terrifying. The other one had come so close to killing me. 

 

"So yes, that's the PULSE. This single machine is behind all of the destruction in the Jasper Ward. But you wouldn't be impressed, as you destroyed the one in Obsidia."

 

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"You know," I answered uneasily, not knowing what he was driving at, "it really was luck. And this one looks even more developed, more dangerous."
"It is." Taka confirmed. "It has had more time to grow, and it's more powerful. There's a drawback, though."
"Is there?"
"You're not familiar with the PULSE project." Taka answered. So it was a "project", not, like, the literal greatest bioengineering achievement of all time. "PULSE stands for Pokemon Ultimation Link-System Exaggerata. A silly acronym, in my opinion, but..." he had a self-mocking smile. "Anyway, as you saw, it morphs the Pokemon and amplifies to some 'supercharge' point its powers. The supplement is theoretically unbounded, but... here's the catch. Oh," he added in a reassuring tone, "stop looking so tense. I know, I'm with Team Meteor, but we can have a civilized conversation, can't we? I'll warn you with plenty of advance when the truce is over."


"If you wish." I answered, not knowing what to say. I couldn't sneak attack him, and I gained information. Net win if I behaved as he desired. As long as I didn't let myself get surrounded. I had to keep being wary. 


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"So, where was I. Yes, the catch. Unsurprisingly, it's very hard on a Pokemon's body to destroy a entire city. It's a physical wrestle against the machine to keep itself alive, or functional. That's why, as I heard, the Obsidia Tangrowth died shortly after fainting." That was the reason, then. "I suppose that poisoning the ground under its core roots did help as well." he added, almost a compliment. 


How on Earth did he knew so much?

 

"Long story short, this Tangrowth's exhausted, worse than Beryl's. I suppose it's because of the fortifications. One of my ideas, I'm afraid. I'm assuming you're here to end it anyway?"
"Yes," I answered, not bothering to lie. Or otherwise complicate the situation by explaining my actual goal, which was leaving Reborn as fast as possible.

 

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"You know, I'm almost tempted to do it myself. It's been responsible for loss of lives, limbs and homes. But... " he stopped abruptly, his eyes avoiding me. There was a short break, and I didn't want the situation to escalate. I -- warily, uneasily -- let him do his thinking. 


He sighed. "Pity you ruined entirely Obsidia undergrowth structures. Team Meteor as a whole, and most of all the bosses, are quite upset. If I were you, I'd prepare invitations."
"Invitations?" I asked, more and more disturbed. Taka, or so he called himself, hadn't made much sense in these last sentences. Was he about to go loony on me? Was he simply mad?
"Yes, invitations. There are people to invite to your funeral watch, and pyre. Us." Taka was saying the sentence very strangely. Not to mention the weird grammar. 
He then took a deep breath. 
"Or, you know, I could abide by my orders. Disarm you, bring you in." I shivered at the thought. Or maybe it was just the cool morning and the tiredness. "Stop the infodumping and slightly cryptic monologue. Battle you." He seemed to think about it for a second, then added, still as if it was all an idle game. "Of course, you, the true hero, would probably win against villanous me, but I wouldn't mind." 

 

What? 

 

I wanted to run. I wanted so badly to run. But I knew I was surrounded by a very thick ring of plants. I would never manage to flee. I didn't have any other choice than battle Taka. Or burn the entire forest, which really wasn't better.

 

Taka's first Pokemon was a frail Exeggcute, which fainted to one hit by Wolfgang, even as the former had to duck the PULSE's attacks. Taka's other Pokemon was a Chatot, a Pokemon which, so far, I hadn't given much thought about, except about it being basically useless. I was, at about the worst possible moment, proven wrong. Taka's Chatot was fast and powerful, and downed Wolfgang without taking a hit. I didn't have anyone matching its capacities, so I would need a Pokemon that could tank the punishment it dished out. Hex, the Swalot, was my best shot, and Batley was there as support. The Swoobat was directing Air Cutters at the vines that got too close, and sending low-power Psychic attacks to keep the Chatot away. 


But they couldn't hold on. Somebody had to be put in timeout. 

 

"Hex, Yawn at the Tangrowth!" I shouted. That would take care of it for a while. 

 

In the meantime, I instructed Batley to start hitting harder at the Chatot. The two bird Pokemon got closer, and a subtle dance followed, as they both dodged the moves of their opponents, while trying to outsmart them. The Confusions were fortunately tiring Taka's Pokemon out, but Batley got outthought and took a fully-powered Chatter attack from below, as she was maneuvering above the Chatot. The sheer power of the move quite literally stunned her in mid-air, and, lacking anything to sustain her, she started falling from maybe thirty feet. 


I started running towards it, but I knew it wouldn't work out. Luckily, Taka got greedy, and instructed his Pokemon to throw a similar attack to put her out for good. There was my chance. That made the Chatot's moves predictable. Meaning...

 

"Hex, Acid Spray on the Chatot!"

 

The Swalot was much slower... But he could grasp enough of the Chatot's future move to hurl the acid at the right spot. Again, the bird didn't react properly and lost its flight. Upon my command, Hex, in a huge effort, propelled herself towards the falling parrot, and hit it with considerable momentum (as I checked out later, she was at least thirty times heavier). The Chatot fell motionless to the ground barely a second after Batley, who also had fainted. 


Taka would not send any more Pokemon at me. Instead, he sat on his bag, took out some candy of his, and started to eat it as I was fighting the wakening Tangrowth. It was a relief, as I would hardly have been able to deal with it otherwise. The bad news, obviously, was that he could use the PULSE's horrific capabilities to defeat me. But if he gave orders to the Tangrowth, I couldn't hear them. The Pokemon (was it even one at this point?) had not appreciated its short rest, and thrashed around. It threw many of its already existing vines at me, and made up for lost time by forcing new ones to grow at most alarming rates. It barely missed Batley as I recalled her, but it hammered mercilessly at Hex, who couldn't answer but throw weakening Acid Sprays at it, as her health was under siege. 


I went all out for this fight. Mouse the Herdier, Leaf, Baby the Loudred -- my remaining healthy Pokemon -- went into battle, making Taka glee and cheer and pick another candy bar. Despite Mouse's bravery, she was knocked out about immediately by the thrashing of a PULSE-controlled angry plant that Leaf had just set ablaze. Due to her typing, Leaf put up a better fight, but the Tangrowth's Mega Drains and plain vine hits were tiring her out fast, while her Flame Wheels weren't causing the Tangrowth any serious damage. At least, they were painful and diverted resources away from Baby, who was actually doing the work. 


As in the previous PULSE fight, Baby did most of the damage. Her Echoed Voice, which she had practised, and whose power increased with repetition, was actually hurting the Tangrowth. The best part probably was that it and Leaf's fiery attacks were distracting the living weapon from trying to beat me to a pulp. After what seemed like an eternity of anguish, of me avoiding comparatively small vine attacks, of Baby screaming her vocal power off, when my back, knees, elbows were begging me to stop, when Baby looked barely able to stand on her own, the Tangrowth wavered, moaned softly, and fell over. 
It was the end. Finally.

 

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"Well, then. What a shame." was Taka's comment as he stood up, still grinning. "I tried my damnedest, and I failed. This is, I think, the part where I laugh maniacally saying that it was for nought, that my evil plan is still in motion, starting from the Beryl Ward PULSE, and that when we come back, you meddling kid will regret it."


He paused, expecting my reaction. 

 

"Why?" was my panting answer. Why was he behaving this way? Why was Team Meteor savaging Reborn City seemingly without reason? Why... "Why is Team Meteor doing this?"

 

"Isn't it obvious?" he drew his arm, pointing at the invaded forest, and towards the Jasper Ward, a reminder of the destructive power he had wielded. "Peace." he grabbed his Pokeballs, called something on his walkie-talkie, and left just like that.

 

It had been very, very close. So unbelievably close. It only would have taken one more blow, one more vine, a couple of wilder moves, an aerial feint from the Chatot, maybe a gambit from Taka, sacrificing his Chatot to let the Tangrowth rampage longer... Or plain squash me, just like it had done to the faster Beedrill. How? How could I have conceivably lived through the ordeal?


And who was that Taka anyway? He was undoubtedly a Meteor member, he had said so himself, but he was unlike any I had met. He wasn't wearing a uniform. He had almost been volunteering information to me, with full awareness of it. But he was in charge of the PULSE, in some way or another, which hinted at him being yet some sort of authority in Team Meteor. What was he up to? What did his parting mean? It looked like anything but genuine... Definitely eerie regardless.


A roar of wind and a heavy impact near me pulled me out of my thoughts. I still hadn't been learning. I could still completely forget about the necessary wariness. A Salamence had landed quite brutally very near me. It was an extremely muscular Pokemon, overflowing with power and confidence. There was no question about where I stood in comparison. Any of my Pokemon, or my very body, would be blown away without a sweat. 
How typical, I thought. I had survived the unnatural abomination, but would be devoured by a perfectly natural dragon.
But I didn't. Instead, I heard a seriously annoyed little girl's voice. 


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"Just what do you even think you're doing?" she shouted at me, hopping from the Salamence. She was small. I was easily one head and a half taller than her. But she could afford to not care, because she had the Salamence. She had bright red hair, a child's face (leading me to assess she couldn't be older than twelve -- talk about taking risky estimates, my inner self-deprecator pointed out) and was wearing absolutely normal clothes, instead of some flight gear one might have been expecting. My eyes were itching, and I was already very weary. I decided there would be no point in making a two-sided confrontation of it. Better hear what she wanted said anyway. Her Salamence was an excellent ambassador in that respect. 


"I was gonna mess up these Meteor jerks myself!" What. "It's not even fair. I finally got away from my dad again so I could go stop the bad guys..." she cut herself off, before her storm of indignation blew again. "And he doesn't even let me do that! He doesn't let me go anywhere! What kind of father doesn't let his daughter go out to beat up bad guys?"


That was a mess which I really didn't want to get involved in. I simply answered, keeping nervous eyes on the Salamence, with as even and adult a voice as I could. You're the adult, Gabriel, she's just a whiny child with too much power ranting at you:


"No parent I know would do that. I mean, let their daughter go out and beat up people. Because, when you try it out, they get smart, and they know to fight back."
"Shut up, you don't understand anything." she retorted. Wow. Most parents I knew wouldn't let for their child to verbally abuse a complete adult stranger. Or any stranger, in fact. But no point in mentioning that either. "Sometimes, I think he's trying to punish me because I remind him of Mom."

 

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No, no, I wasn't having that conversation and I was definitely not getting involved with that. 
 

"But the joke's on him because not only did I steal Mom's ring but I snuck out to beat people up too." And he's now aware of it and he would take measures. "But, to go back to the point," she said, pointing at the decaying cyborg Tangrowth, "there's another of these machines up in the Beryl Ward, where I live. I'm gonna blow that one up, and don't you dare try and stop me." her tone was dead serious. "Salamence." she ordered. "We're taking off."


The dragon, of course, took off with their powerful body and large wings, and the gush of wind was enough to make me lose balance. 

 

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Who was that? That insufferable, annoying, entitled, tiny, stupid child?

 

I definitely wouldn't mind her doing the job in my stead, though.

 

 

 

 

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@Evi Crystal: Thank you! 

 

So I cut down on some text... meaning that a pointless episode was skipped, and you were thus spared about a short chapter's length (and an unjustified appearance of Fern). I suppose that the terribly made screenshots mandate some form of apology -- so please forgive me for their quality, or more accurately total lack thereof. 

Which also means that the finale of Part 1 is actually nearing! 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 22: Double or Nothing


 

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Time for the next chapter -- we're properly starting the finale of Part 1! 

My plot is more advanced than that -- I'm working on the Orphanage part , as I'm trying to figure out how to make Gabriel carry out such a blatant and risky breach of the rules.  

 

 

Chapter 23: Friends and Foes

 

 

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Aaaand the bets are off! Will Gabriel and Heather triumph from the PULSE Tangrowth and the Meteor Edgelord? Are they equipped to handle the cold reality? 

Keep reading to find out! 

 

 

 

Chapter 24: The Cleansing

 

 

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Since we're in kind of an important progression, I'm making a slightly shorter delay for this chapter and the next one which is the finale of Part 1. Expect a bit of a hiatus afterwards as I need to fully figure out Gabriel's next misfortunes the next steps of the plot. Mostly, I need to fill in the blanks between the end of Part 1 and whichever showdowns I plan for Part 2. 

 

Warning: There are some descriptions of violence in the chapter but nothing imo that's harsher than the game. 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 25: Last Stand

 

 

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So here we are, at the very last chapter of Part 1. I didn't make any pictures, maybe I'll add some later. Perhaps how the battle against the game's Corey went, perhaps something about Beryl Bridge. 

As I said, there is going to be a short hiatus after this one, you'll have to go find something else to read for a while (how fortunate, I suppose, that someone decided to start a new season of their tale).  I have plot details for Part 2 to figure out -- Yureyu, the Orphanage, Blacksteam to some extent. 

If you really are bored in that time, you might also try and find some little hints that may be relevant in the future, or bring to light all the pointless references... or try the math problem from chapter 16. 

 

Enjoy!

 

Chapter 26: Darwinism

 

 

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 Hello! 

The hiatus is finally over. I expected it to last two or three weeks but actually it went for five weeks. Time does slip by. 

Shameful confession: I used to judge fanfiction authors doing that kind of stuff. Couldn't they manage their schedules, plan ahead, or something? But, well... Now, I know better. 

 

Anyway, the second part of the story is starting... It should be faster-paced than the first part, in my outline the Shelly fight is in "only" five chapters! 

I hope you enjoy.  

 

Also, I noticed that we're almost at 3200 views now! That's great!

 

Part 2: Taking Responsibility

 

"Man's motive power is his moral code."

A controversial, yet influential, American best-seller from the 1950s

 

 

Chapter 27: No Rest for the Wretched

 

 

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Now, I really should get back at writing, because my buffer is diminishing... But never mind, as usual in the week-ends, I can give you the next chapter. 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 28: The Enemy's Gate

 

 

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@TheHellHamster: Thank you very much! 

 

Thank you to all of you who read and enjoy the story (for those who read and don't enjoy, please tell me what you think I'm doing wrong 😀).

 

As you may have seen it on Discord or the status bar, I'm not very fond of this chapter. I keep feeling something is wrong with it, but I can't find out what exactly. So after a last revision, here it is...

 

This is the chapter of the Aster and Eclipse battle underneath the Staircase, if you didn't follow. It went more smoothly than I had hoped for, mostly because of the work of another Pokemon which isn't in Gabriel's team yet (obviously, there's not a full correlation between the story and the playthrough), and I don't want to spoil the surprise. You won't have to wait long for it, though. 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 29: A Mob Job Gone Wrong

 

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Hi!

I'm not uploading with the usual schedule, I had other things to do (mostly the mental load of procrastinating getting in touch with people, but a bit of thesis too). I'm not 100 percent sure about this chapter either, but it fits a purpose (several, actually). Whether it is the best way to fulfill it, is what I don't know.   

 

Anyway, I think I'm the only one reading all the doubt-filled posts before chapters, so I'll stop straining your patience. 

 

(Random question: I've started putting chapter texts in spoilers, because I felt it let the progression be easier to spot -- do you like it this way or was the earlier method better?)

 

 

 

 

Chapter 30: Presents Day

 

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Thank you @Evi Crystal for your comment! And you haven't even seen how Gabriel takes it. 

 

So, I haven't been following my posting schedule, it's surprising the amount of things I've had to do these last days -- help grandparents move out, finish writing my master's thesis, understand the answers to some technical questions I had asked the researcher who knows the topic very well... Never mind. 

 

About the present chapter -- as you've seen, we've started not following the game's timeline. I think it's a good place to recall a disclaimer I think I already wrote somewhere: Gabriel isn't supposed to be a role model -- he usually means well, but that doesn't make his actions themselves advisable.

 

 

 

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Nice touch! Similar to mine story and your protagonist seems to care, but sadly- as you put in- his actions aren't good. Also feel bad for him for getring involved in such circumstances. Hope he'll be okay.

 

Also for my story, like you... I don't follow my schedule as well, due to doing lots of applications for jobs (my old one got closed down). 

 

Kudos for your story🤗💝

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  On 7/18/2020 at 10:06 PM, Candy said:

Lol dw protagonists who are role models aren’t common in these forums 🤣

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Wait, you mean that Vanilla isn’t... 

Well... I’ll, er... be right back. 

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Yes, Gabriel does care... in his way. His rationale is that it’s not an easy commitment to make to provide for Heather’s physical needs (food, shelter, safety, stability) until she comes of age. He doesn’t believe Cain understands that and won’t commit himself because he certainly intends to have left Reborn City far before Heather comes of age.

 

 So of course (as a first-world math nerd) he concludes that an orphanage suits Heather better, if they (or at least Shelly) are allowed visits, to provide for Heather’s (and Shelly’s maybe) emotional needs. 

 

Of course, in Reborn canon the decision is wrong, but given the information available, can you blame him? Heather’s likely fate as a 10-year-old on her own in Reborn City could be... tragic (look at what very nearly happened to Lucia and Victoria in Chronicverse, and they’re about adults!), even without Team Meteor to hunt her. 
 

@Evi Crystal: I wish you luck for your job applications!

It’s easier to say as a reader than as a writer but I trust your readers to be patient. 

(Although seven months’ wait for Derog’s Rejuv is a little long... here’s to hoping it’s not cancelled)

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Hey, it's been quite a while since the last chapter -- that's summer vacation for you. 

(I swear, I'll try not to make that many excuses from now on)

 

The views counter keeps growing, I'm quite amazed -- thank you to all those of you who read. 

 

This chapter and the next one follow a nonlinear time structure, meaning that some events in chapter 33 happen between some of those of chapter 32 and some of those of chapter 31. I've tried to keep mentioning the correct timelines so that you don't get too confused. 

There is also a little riddle in the chapter -- do you like crypto? Whether you played the game or not, you have all the necessary information to solve it (if you're interested) at the end of the chapter.  

Finally, a point for more about the story as a whole -- there may be spoilers for some books, films, or fan fictions. But they'll be written carefully enough, so that one can't realize which work this spoils, so I don't think that counts. 

 

 

 

Chapter 32: Undertakings

 

 


 

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Feeling the tension is coming up in the orphanage and I'm thinking Gabriel will pay the price again, because of how messed up things are.

 

Also wonder, how is your universe's situation plot?

 

Reading the story again, makes me think that Gabriel is a honest and trying to be more civil, but becoming an unwilling "accent" in the battle against Team Meteor and he's just trying to stay out from major trouble, but gets into more (like with the events in Beryl Ward).

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Thank you @Evi Crystal for your comment!

 

I was trying to answer yesterday and it devolved into more or less a retelling of every internal monologue Gabriel had to this point... so something pretty useless.

So I'll try to summarize Gabriel's attitude differently.

 

He's lawful good at heart, but he's in Reborn City, a place almost as far as possible from everything he's ever witnessed. A harsh, torn apart, unforgiving place, where he doesn't even believe he had any reason to go to in the first place. So he has two main goals: survive and leave. Hence, as he's not a fighter, his attempting to not make any enemies (especially not any officials, because they control when the station is rebuilt) and remain on the sidelines. Trying to not take sides, and especially to not go to extremes, is pretty natural to him. In the Orphanage situation, there is also (I think I wrote about that) another reason for him not wanting to storm the place: his first-world belief in institutions in general (hence the "lawful"), and in particular in the Orphanage being very likely a better place to children than just living in Reborn's street.

 

I'm not entirely sure what you mean by my universe's situation plot? It's not exactly like it, but it's set in a universe mostly like canon Reborn, with minor differences that will appear in time.

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  On 8/26/2020 at 8:51 PM, Mindlack said:

I'm not entirely sure what you mean by my universe's situation plot? It's not exactly like it, but it's set in a universe mostly like canon Reborn, with minor differences that will appear in time.

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I mean "Alternative Story" with a different timeline Aus

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Hey, new chapter here!

Perhaps I should apologize to Ame for how I portrayed her self-insert... You'll decide for yourselves, I guess. 

 

 

Chapter 33: Shocking Authorities

 

 

 

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Here's the new chapter, we're ending the Orphanage arc here. Which, alas, leaves us to deal with the consequences afterwards...

 

Something something Shade fight something something Azurine something something screenshots something something Amaria something something Blacksteam

 

(don't pay attention, that's just my subconscious complaining about the next chapters not coming too smoothly -- but it'll work out in the end). 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 34: Breaking Out

 

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