The Awakened [OOC - Registrations Closed]

[Flux]

So it's been a while... Just a check, how many of you are still here and still interested?

[Sutoratosu]

I ain't leaving till he gets his family back. Liam neeson style preferably.

Yeah, I'm still interested.

[Arkhi]

I'm here & interested. Just don't know what to post.

[K_H]

Still here. Still interested.

Edited February 1, 2015 by K_H

[Jory]

Here, interested, and ready for some serious exposition on Lux's family. PM me about it and we'll figure what chapter it'll be happening in.

[rustytengo]

yeah i'm still interested i at least want to finish one of these.

[Flux]

Well, looks like almost everyone is still here. No response from Hukuna, but seeing as he was the last one I was moving along, I'm assuming he's still somewhat interested. If not, that's fine too, but I'll try to get a post up sometime soon. (And hopefully we'll eventually wrap up chapter one...)

[Arkhi]

Well, looks like almost everyone is still here. No response from Hukuna, but seeing as he was the last one I was moving along, I'm assuming he's still somewhat interested. If not, that's fine to, but I'll try to get a post up sometime soon. (And hopefully we'll eventually wrap up chapter one...)

Hukuna headed for bed around two hours ago, so that may be it.

Is Chapter One expected to end soon?

[Flux]

Yeah, I was planning to wrap it up as soon as the interaction with Hukuna ended, but got sidetracked and kinda forgot the RP subforums existed for about 2 weeks.

[rustytengo]

don't worry that ill happen to anyone if they get distracted.

[Flux]

Looks like I won't have the time to update today after all... Things are going to be a bit slow for me until the 8th, but I'll do what I can. Sorry for the extra wait.

[K_H]

Ah, s'okay. School kinda ties me up a little on the Weekdays.

[Sutoratosu]

*Pokes head in briefly*

So...been a bit quiet around here for a good while or so... everything alright?

[Flux]

Yeah, I'm waiting on Hukuna at the moment. I shot him a pm a while back about it, and he said he hadn't been able to get to it because of an injury. It's been a while since then though, so he might have forgotten. I'll give him a bit to see if he sees this thread and replies, but otherwise I'll throw another pm his way. I have all intentions of continuing this.

[K_H]

I wouldn't count on his being interested... he's implied that he's withdrawing from all RPs.

[Flux]

Really? When was this and in what thread?? (Or status update?) I'd be interested in seeing that if you'd be so kind to point me in the right direction.

[K_H]

Well, for one thing, he's left AGS. let me find his Profile and I'll see if he's made a Status Update concerning his position on being a RPer.

EDIT: No luck finding the Update. assume that he's dropped out for now.

Edited March 12, 2015 by Trainer Red

[Flux]

I shot him a pm today asking about it. I'll see what he says before we go on.

[Sutoratosu]

I honestly just went ahead and winged that whole little speech, so might not make sense (Or it might make a whole lot of sense, IDK, guess it depends on the individual and what not)

and for some reason... I couldn't help but think of this right here for it...

[Flux]

All right guys, it's taken us a while, but we've finally reached the end of Chapter 1! I'd greatly appreciate it if all of you could answer these questions, some of which are to improve my ability as a host, and others that are purely for my own curiosity. Without further ado, here they are:

What do you feel is my greatest strength as a host with this RP? What is my greatest flaw? (Don't hold anything back. I want honest opinions if I am to improve as a host, and I promise I won't be angry or offended.)

With the above in mind, what is your overall opinion of my work as host of this RP?

If there is one thing you could change in this RP to make it more interesting and enjoyable for you, what would it be?

Do you like the method of hosting I am using to tell the story? If not, what would you rather see?

Do you enjoy the plot itself so far?

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most believable character(s)? (Not necessarily your favorite.)

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most unbelievable? (AKA which NPC(s) need the most work in terms of character?)

Which NPC would you most like to learn more about?

Which NPC is your favorite and why?

Which NPC is your least favorite and why?

Which character do you feel you would get along with best if they really existed? Worst? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Which character do you think is the strongest? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Which of the established groups would you personally like to see succeed? (The government, Utopia, the Organization, Beetle's group... Does not necessarily have to be the group your PC is affiliated with.)

If you were to make a prediction about something in the future of the RP, what would you say?

If you could ask me any question about something related to this RP and I would answer it, what would you want to know? (Not saying I'll actually answer these... but I'm curious.)

[Arkhi]

What do you feel is my greatest strength as a host with this RP? What is my greatest flaw? (Don't hold anything back. I want honest opinions if I am to improve as a host, and I promise I won't be angry or offended.)

Your greatest strength is great organization. When you created a map of the building Hades and Keaton infiltrated, I was honestly very surprised. That saved the story from being confusing and jumbled up, as well as showing your dedication to the RP.
Your greatest flaw would be updating the RP. School really is a big time-eating machine, so I know that feel. Hell, if I had free time, I'd host an RP.

With the above in mind, what is your overall opinion of my work as host of this RP?

Discounting the gaps, this would be the best RP I've been in, second to Aervana. I love your work as an RP host!

If there is one thing you could change in this RP to make it more interesting and enjoyable for you, what would it be?

I understand this was chapter one, but with many of the characters separated, the story wasn't particularly as tight-knit as it could be. To make it more enjoyable and interesting, I would conglomerate the characters as much as possible into one, two, or three groups. Leaving a character on their own makes the RPer less likely to post, I'd think, so the story doesn't progress. If many characters are together, the story would be more flowing.

Do you like the method of hosting I am using to tell the story? If not, what would you rather see?

I'm enjoying it \^o^/

Do you enjoy the plot itself so far?

Because the plot is fairly vague- reach the Pillars- it leaves a lot to the RPers to move about with. Though, because it's such a lax plotline, the story doesn't feel like it progressed much.

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most believable character(s)? (Not necessarily your favorite.)

Ms. Archer seems very believable.

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most unbelievable? (AKA which NPC(s) need the most work in terms of character?)

Hades was pretty crazy. Though, because he's (probably) killed off, I don't know that he'll need a check-up. Still, I think his character was great enough to not need to be changed at all.

Which NPC would you most like to learn more about?

I don't really know enough NPCs, but if I had to pick, I'd like to learn about Zeus.

Which NPC is your favorite and why?

Hades. Keaton and him went on a mission together and, for as much as Keaton loathed him, he was a great conflicting character with Keaton. That made the story more believable.

Which NPC is your least favorite and why?

Again, I don't know enough. If I had to pick, it would be Ms. Archer, simply because I don't know much about her. Truth be told, because my character was separated from the others, I didn't read through other events in the RP.

Which character do you feel you would get along with best if they really existed? Worst? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Best: Zeus.

Worst: Viktor

Which character do you think is the strongest? (Can be a PC or NPC)

That damn, shady character in the white suit who killed(?) Hades.

Which of the established groups would you personally like to see succeed? (The government, Utopia, the Organization, Beetle's group... Does not necessarily have to be the group your PC is affiliated with.)

The Organization sounds like it could have an outstanding back story. I'd like to see them succeed.

If you were to make a prediction about something in the future of the RP, what would you say?

Our PCs get very close the the Pillars, have the fight of their lives, and... lose.

If you could ask me any question about something related to this RP and I would answer it, what would you want to know? (Not saying I'll actually answer these... but I'm curious.)

What's the theme/song for this RP? c:

[Flux]

Just a heads up, I'm probably not going to post up Chapter 2 until I get a bit more feedback than one post... It really is important.

[K_H]

What do you feel is my greatest strength as a host with this RP? What is my greatest flaw? (Don't hold anything back. I want honest opinions if I am to improve as a host, and I promise I won't be angry or offended.)

Well, I don't really have any opinions on this, i'd say you're a well-rounded Host.

With the above in mind, what is your overall opinion of my work as host of this RP?

You're doing great!

If there is one thing you could change in this RP to make it more interesting and enjoyable for you, what would it be?

There's actually nothing i'd want to change.

Do you like the method of hosting I am using to tell the story? If not, what would you rather see?

You're using a good method to tell the story, and you should keep up the good work.

Do you enjoy the plot itself so far?

You bet I do!

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most believable character(s)? (Not necessarily your favorite.)

I'd say that Cedric and Ms. Archer are the most realistic of the NPCs.

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most unbelievable? (AKA which NPC(s) need the most work in terms of character?)

Probably the Shapeshifter is the least Realistic. then again, it might just be my inexperience showing through...

Which NPC would you most like to learn more about?

Cedric, for sure. he's the most enigmatic one, IMO.

Which NPC is your favorite and why?

I'd say that Cedric would be my favorite, because he seems so relatable! It would be a HUGE Plot Twist if it turned out that he has no Powers.

Which NPC is your least favorite and why?

it would probably be the guy in charge of Utopia. He just gives off a sense of bad vibes, but in a way that's conducive to this RP.

Which character do you feel you would get along with best if they really existed? Worst? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Best: I don't really know.

Worst: Utopia's Leader

Which character do you think is the strongest? (Can be a PC or NPC)

probably that muscle-man that Kenny and Ace faced off against in the Prison. I mean, if he can withstand what we gave him, and then dish out an equal amount, that's one powerful guy!

Which of the established groups would you personally like to see succeed? (The government, Utopia, the Organization, Beetle's group... Does not necessarily have to be the group your PC is affiliated with.)

I'd definitely like to see Beetle's Group and the Organization be successful.

If you were to make a prediction about something in the future of the RP, what would you say?

Well, i'd say that there would be something along the lines of our PCs being so close to success when they fail because of some unknown tragedy among the group.

If you could ask me any question about something related to this RP and I would answer it, what would you want to know?

Hmm... that's a toughie.

I don't have any questions, actually.

[rustytengo]

What do you feel is my greatest strength as a host with this RP? What is my greatest flaw? (Don't hold anything back. I want honest opinions if I am to improve as a host, and I promise I won't be angry or offended.)

strength you have made a very fun world to RP in which is the best thing in my mind anyway.

flaw well I'm just as guilty for this as you but for me it would be updating.

With the above in mind, what is your overall opinion of my work as host of this RP?

your a great host

If there is one thing you could change in this RP to make it more interesting and enjoyable for you, what would it be?

not sure really it already a lot of fun for me as it is

Do you like the method of hosting I am using to tell the story? If not, what would you rather see?

yes, yes i do

Do you enjoy the plot itself so far?

yes

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most believable character(s)? (Not necessarily your favorite.)

Hmm.. thats hard i would probably say Ms.Archer as well

Which NPC(s) do you find to be the most unbelievable? (AKA which NPC(s) need the most work in terms of character?)

Hmm not sure i really didn't spend much time dealing with to many of the NPCs so I'm not sure(we also haven't see that much of them in general)

Which NPC would you most like to learn more about?

Blue

Which NPC is your favorite and why?

not sure probably Hades cause crazy

Which NPC is your least favorite and why?

Cedric mainly because I don't(and Beverly as well) trust him.

Which character do you feel you would get along with best if they really existed? Worst? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Best:Beverly... jk I'm not actually sure

Worst: Any of the leaders of the groups for the or the crazy religious guy

Which character do you think is the strongest? (Can be a PC or NPC)

Beverly du.....JK again(though she is the only mind messer known and she never even told every one the full extent of her power) Probably Hades just because i have a feeling hes not going to stay dead.

Which of the established groups would you personally like to see succeed? (The government, Utopia, the Organization, Beetle's group... Does not necessarily have to be the group your PC is affiliated with.) The Organization or Beetle mainly because they seem to be the lesser of two evils at this point.

If you were to make a prediction about something in the future of the RP, what would you say?

WE are all gonna die or Beverly getting abducted by some other group onces they find out about her powers or you getting killed because of them or her killing someone with them.

If you could ask me any question about something related to this RP and I would answer it, what would you want to know? (Not saying I'll actually answer these... but I'm curious.)

Hmm...why the hell did no one ever shake Beverly's hand when she offered, or just how uncommon our powers like Beverly's?

Edited March 26, 2015 by rustytengo

[Raindrop Valkyrie]

Q 1: As always, You have a great eye for detail in your worlds. You put in small things and you organize them well and efficiently. I never feel like I am being bombarded by too much pointless stuff or exposition. They feel fleshed out, but not in a way that makes it feel like there was jsut too much time spent on doing it.

Weakness certainly the time thing. It is not something that can be helped certainly, and everyone is parroting it. But I have to say it as well.

Q 2: Kinda a throw away question going to be honest lol. You are a good host, you shouldn't need me to tell you that lol.

Q 3: Get some more interaction between PCs or the groups they are a part of. I really want to see this groups of Awakened with different ideals butt heads. We got a small taste in Chapter 1, but not a lot.

Q 4: The storytelling is alright, the main issue... since it is so one on one right now, a lot of us get lost in the areas where more than one PC are to interact. My character and certainly Arky's character get a bit robbed of screen-time because as we are by ourselves we don't get updates often. We have no one else to spring off of other than you as the host, so it gets long periods of time I am doing a whole lotta nothin'. Inversely, those that are in areas with more people, they are replying all the time and a lot. Our characters tend to get lost in those interactions jsut because they are s much busier. If this was like season 1 of a show, Viktor and Miss Archer would almost be more of... side characters. Just kinda fluff stuff going on in the background. ((same with Hades and Keaton really.)) As I said we certainly need the groups to clash more get in more interaction between pcs.

Q 5: I am, though I would love to be able to see how Viktor reacts to the other groups more. He kinda came across low-ranking fanatical goons of Utopia. SO he didn't truly interact with them. SO far Chapter 1 very much felt like it was setting the stage, and getting ready for Season 2 to happen. The seeds have been set, and know we will see how they grow.

Q 6: Ms. Archer, but probably because she seems the most like a real person. She seems like someone I could actually have a convo with or run into irl.

Q 7: that ()'d part is a completely different question... so not sure how to answer this. But... I can;t remember his name but I don;t like the guy who is in charge of Utopia... he doesn't have a motive nor does he seem to even agree with what his underlings do that much. It is jarring and weird and I hate it.

Q 8: Ms. Archer... not biased at all. Nope... nuh uh... negatory.... Hukuna Sesnei totally wouldn't be.

Q 9: Ms. Archer. She is actually intersting, becuase she is kinda a normal person in the sea of annoying Super mutants who think they are better than everyone else. ((being over dramatic here for effect, but that is why I find her intersting she is very differnet to all the others and that is the bet thing. And totally not biased once again... NOOOOPE.))

Q 10: Utopia Leader guy... he is annoyingly ugh levels of make me cringe. I don't think he is all that well written and it bothers me.

Q 11: Best: Certainly Ms, Archer or Keaton. Those 2 are the most level headed imo...

Worst: Viktor ((yes... my own character.)). He is all kinds of stuff that i don;t agree with. He feels sorry for himself a lot and just abandons people because it hurts him to much. He is not a person I would get along with.

Q 12: Viktor, not tooting my own horn... But I still have misgivings abut how kinda secret op his powers are. While he pretty much almost kills himself to do it... he can outright instantly kill any person. ((because he can cause all sorts of messed up stuff to happen to you.)) Now, that is not likely to ever occur, cause he is basically dead if he does, but his power is kinda stinking insane. SInce he can cause so much literal pain in people, cause Heart attacks by blocking the ateriers to the heart.... he can do suuuuper nasty shit to people and as long as he is carrying a load of iro... he will be fine for the most part. Not to mention... he doesn't need to see you to do it. He can feel Iron around him ((including that in others blood.)) so while he won;t be pinpoint accurate if he can't see you... he can still do it. If I could go back and redesign that power a bit I would... but he is definitely super powerful. ((this is without mentioning he is a trained soldier on top of this.))

Q 13: I kinda want every single faction to lose. Not even joking... XD

Q 14: Nothing really. I don't really like predicting stuff. Cause you never know what could happen.

Q 15: How O.p, do you think Viktor is? I still kinda feel like his powers are a bit... too good.

Also, Pm me once you are ready to get the stuff on the way so we can finish up that little loose end from CHapter 1. ((hopefully you know what I mean XD>))