-AvA- Posted July 12, 2014 Share Posted July 12, 2014 (edited) Name: Draxen of Sevenwells Species: Human Age: 30 years Appearance: Brown buzzcut hair, a strong jaw with a hint of subtle and built with a warrior's body littered with scars all over his tanned physique. Everything about Draxen is intimidating, with the exception of his eyes. Big, round and as green as the summer grass, yet they burn with a lust for dragon's blood. His choice of attire is a black leather armour reinforced with metal. Favours the bastard sword with a shield when necessary. Backstory: Hails from the village of Sevenwells, famed for housing one of the best mercenary guild. Son of the guild's forgemaster who grew into a renowned sword for hire and has turned his gaze from mortal beings to the gods of the sky. Edited July 21, 2014 by -AvA- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SithBaker Posted July 22, 2014 Share Posted July 22, 2014 (edited) Sooo, count me in! AND PREPARE FOR A DISTINCT LACK OF MERCY, SCALE-SCUM! Name: Thanacius Species: Human(imbued) Age: Fifty-something (looks twenty) Appearance: Long, nearly straight black hair, sharp nose and chin, and the eyes of a seasoned killer. His elegant, yet strong body build could, while he holds his composure, make him look appealing and attractive, however, once he becomes a bit agitated, he reveals his inhuman fangs and oversized mouth. As to his apparel, he wears loose clothes, even in battle; they Edited July 28, 2014 by SithBaker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonmcdonald Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 So, SpiritBaker asked me on PlayDotA if I was interested in this.I'm not so sure about signing up to a new forum exclusively for a roleplay, but, Alemannia was fun, so here I am. I'll create a character, but I might not ever visit this place again (though, I have every intention to). So, be aware of that.Name: Luke Species: Human (what other humanoid races are available? I'm not familiar with DnD at all) Age: 24 Appearance: Short, sandy brown hair. Blue eyes. Light complexion, but you wouldn't guess it from his skin being almost infused with the smoke and soot of the forge. Powerful upper body and arms due to working metal, but weaker legs: Running is among his least favourite activities. Wears an apron and toolbelt most of the time, but wears chainmail and plated spaulders during combat. All of his armour is custom made by himself, fitting him perfectly and allowing for flexibility and quick movement despite his lack of natural agility. Weapons: Fights using a long sword, but is proficient with fire magic. Using the two together is assisted by his understanding of Blacksmithing. Backstory: His father, a humble town guard, often noticed a youthful Luke's fascination with the forge when the father and son went together to collect weapons or armour. Asking if Luke could become an apprentice, the Forgemaster was eager to take Luke under his wing. From training under his father and the Forgemaster, Luke became a skillful Blacksmith and a formidable fighter. But, more than anything, the flames of the forge interested him greatly. He pursued knowledge about fire from his father, and the Forgemaster. They suggested he ask some travelling wizards about it.One day, a wizard was passing through town and young Luke went to meet him. He asked him for everything there is to know about fire. The wizard smirked, but didn't answer the question. "Fire is a mistress that cannot be controlled; a wild animal that cannot be tamed. If you're interested in magic, it would be best to focus on a different affinity." But Luke said "No, not magic. Just the fire." The wizard refused to speak any more, but yet the next night, when the wizard had continued his travels, Luke returned home from the forge to find a book under his pillow, entitled "Magma - The Dragon's Breath." He could not read it, but his mentors, in the form of his father and the Forgemaster soon imparted their teachings to him and he learned to read the old tome. It was a story about a miner who stumbled into a dragon's cave, and though its scales appeared black, it was kind and welcoming to him. The miner became trapped when he delved further due to a rockfall, but the dragon protected him and helped him move the rocks. The Dragon in the story mentioned a material called "Magma," boiling hot rock from within the world, that apparently the whole world was once molded from, and a special place where the Magma flows but never cools. The book also detailed the incantation of fire magic, which the Dragon used to melt the rocks. Re-reading this book many hundreds of times, Luke figured out what he had to do, and each day, when the Forgemaster left to relieve himself, Luke would try and control the flames in the forge to move as he wanted them to. Years passed, until one day, they flames moved, and Luke shouted in surprise, rushing off to find his father. But when he turned around, he saw the travelling wizard standing there. "I suppose you read the book, then? I'm sorry, because the text is very misinformed about fire. Though, I see you're still eager to learn more about it." The wizard stayed in town for one night, but had no opportunity to rest: For he had made it his task to teach Luke the mysteries of fire, or die trying. For a few minutes, the wizard instructed Luke on different ways of channeling his spirit to create a flame, and upon being told to do exactly as the wizard said, he summoned a flame with ease. Training by himself, he learned how to cast many fire spells, which helped him greatly in improving his craftsmanship. A successful fighter, blacksmith, and fire mage, Luke is now a man. But yet, he still yearns to learn more about fire. And more about The Dragon's Kiss. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raindrop Valkyrie Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Both of these characters are pretty Sue-ish, @Sith, First of all, imbuing your your character with a dragon soul is definitely just a power grab and highly Sue-ish in Nature. Every single thing you list as a nasty or bad side effect is actually a benefit to your character and is giving you access to ludicrous powers that no PC should have. The fact you flat out say this poison can almost never be healed, is especially dangerous to dragons, and never fully heal is blatantly over-powered no ifs, ands, or buts. No character should be both a Mage and a Fighter of utmost skill, if you are both you should be weaker in both areas as there is no way you could be equally skilled in both as a Master. (I don't even think Murdoc is even allowing multiclasses to begin with but we do need some guidelines on that stuff.). No character should ever be Immortal. That is a huge no-no, and should never be done. It is never RPed well, and just shouldn't be something that a PC ever has. Also, what is Deathsight? You mention it but never explain what it is at all, just saying it is something a Necromancer would have. @Jon, similar things are up with you character as well. You claim he is an accomplished Blacksmith, Fighter, and Mage. THis is simply way to many things he is skilled in with absolutely nothing to balance it out. He seems like he is good at everything he ever does and that nothing actually challenges him in anyway. Also, Smithing has nothing to do with fighting or would help you in using magic, that line makes no sense. SO what if you can forge a sword? That doesn't mean you know how to use one. It also doesn't make you any more adept at using Flames as magic then anybody else. I will say, I think if you just removed that Line, I would be a bit more fine with your character, though some stuff still doesn't sit all that well with me. All in all, and after what seem might be a bit of railing, welcome to the Reborn RP forums I really hope you guys enjoy your stay if you decide to stick around. I really wish I could find something positive to bring out of this and praise something about your characters, but it is hard with the state they are in. Them being both Mages and Fighters more matters on whether or not Murdoc is allowing Dual-Classing, so I don't know how to remedy that. However, you guys are going to need some serious tweaks to make you characters not be Mary Sues. Basically, don't try and add strange supernatural abilities that normal characters wouldn't have for starters. This really is for your benefits, as Sues are rather disruptive to the RP and ruin the experience for others and often times the owner of the Sue as well. It is no fun to play a character who is perfect in every way and cannot fail. All it does is kill any tension of a situation as you just butcher everything in your path, or make the other players feel like there is no point in them even being there. Hopefully, we get more eyes on this soon, see what some others assessments are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SithBaker Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 (edited) Oh, well, since we have dragons against us, having powerful characters is fairly legit, I would say. Murdoc had a brief look at mine and didn't object to anything, so I would presume he thinks so too... Deathsight is just the ability to see (or otherwise comprehend) the flow of life in things. A basic thing for any necromancer but the cliché skeleton raiser one. Edited July 23, 2014 by SithBaker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raindrop Valkyrie Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Ah, that is fine then, I wasn't aware he would be powering up the Player characters that were non-dragons. If he is fine with it, then I am as well. (sorry about that then XD, I think I will leave it up as a thing since has got important points in it, just not for this RP then I guess.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SithBaker Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Not necessarily powering up, no, just allowing, I recon. I mean, once you let people play dragons, it makes sense to give people a certain freedom as to their power levels. In the end, the actual power level is decided by the players perception of what he should be able to do, and not his characters bio anyway. I don't expect to solo-kill ancient dragons, not only because of my power level, but also because just killing other PCs one-on-one doesn't usually forward the story significantly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raindrop Valkyrie Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Alrighty, good good. Just making sure. (you're new don't exactly know your level of RP experience.), if you think you can handle it go for it. I am a bit overly cautious whenever new people show up. (only because I have dealt with people that are completely new to all this.) Really though, glad to have you man, hope you enjoy your stay around here and really looking forward to RPing with you. I like seeing how others RP stuff, since obviously it is different from my own methods. (Also really think I jumped the gun on this, so I will admit I derped a bit hard. I guess I should reasonably have though PCs would be a bit more powerful, where other Players are straight up playing Dragons.....sometimes your sense of scope gets lost on you. This is kinda early on, if you didn't notice so some things are a bit blurry, so you will have to excuse me for earlier.) Just to be clear, the immortality thing is just a don't die of old age thing right? (cause I can overlook that for this.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SithBaker Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Oh, yeah, of course. It s just longevity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonmcdonald Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 I understand your comments about power-levels perhaps being out of whack, but as Baker says: By comparison to what power other characters are supposed to have (seeing as they're dragons), it can't be that bad.And I don't see how it makes a character Sue-ish, regardless. I didn't say "He's the best sword fighter in his town" I said that "He became a formidable fighter" To me, that sounds like "Slightly above average," not "Godly with a sword." And fire magic would help with metalworking, due to being able to heat up particular parts of the metal in order to shape it differently in certain places. As for the "Smithing has nothing to do with fighting and wouldn't help you with magic" comment, I disagree. Blacksmithing helps one understand the way fire interacts with metal, so if you were to heat up your sword in the right places (using fire magic), you could adjust the balance and shape of the blade in the midst of battle. It would also mean you could control the heat of the metal when you were forging it in the first place, meaning the quality of the craft could be higher overall. No, smithing doesn't help you with magic, but magic assists smithing. So, from a scale of one to 10, I would say: His skill with blacksmithing would be good, 7/10, but he's not a master yet. His skill with a sword is slightly above average, 5.5/10. And his knowledge of fire magic is similar to that of a beginner, but his passion for fire makes him a little better, 3/10; this skill is only notable because he managed to learn it without formal training ("Proficient" wasn't the right word to use, I guess. But even that doesn't mean you're some kind of prodigy like you're making it out to be). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevaleresse Posted July 23, 2014 Author Share Posted July 23, 2014 I did mention that there would be a huge amount of leeway for PCs, since dragons are pretty sue-ish by nature. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flux Posted July 23, 2014 Share Posted July 23, 2014 Blacksmithing helps one understand the way fire interacts with metal, so if you were to heat up your sword in the right places (using fire magic), you could adjust the balance and shape of the blade in the midst of battle. Just popping in to say... even with fire magic and knowledge of blacksmithing, it wouldn't be that easy to change your blades shape to anything remotely useful in the midst of battle. Blacksmith's tools consist of more than just the forge, so likewise, shifting your blade to any other sort of type would require those tools and thus not be possible in battle. It's not really like you can shape molten metal with your hands, let alone have enough force behind them to flatten and shape it well... >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevaleresse Posted July 24, 2014 Author Share Posted July 24, 2014 I'll be gone for a couple days, btw. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K_H Posted August 6, 2014 Share Posted August 6, 2014 I DO hope that this RP hasn't died in its infancy... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevaleresse Posted August 6, 2014 Author Share Posted August 6, 2014 It hasn't, I'm just- King Murdoc cancels build world: Interrupted by Dwarf Fortress. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarkLight Posted August 23, 2014 Share Posted August 23, 2014 Out of curiosity, what is happening with this RP? Any status update? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevaleresse Posted August 23, 2014 Author Share Posted August 23, 2014 bleagh writers block and a number of distractions have gotten to me, but I'm still planning on running this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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